[Elina]

Okay, my scripting sucked, so a bunch of the lip flaps were off... and I had to use Movie Maker for it as well...

Link: http://www.megaupload.com/?d=FDK00J0N

Time: 22 minutes

Size: 92 mb

Cast
Opening Song: Tsuki
Kaoru: Corey Maddox
Itsuki: MaskedDrifter
Aoi: Scarlotte
Miyabi: Kitty
Little Girl: KStar
Little Boy: Rasha
Tina: Moondust8765
Mayu: Morningstar_Smiles
Chika: Elina
Taeko: Windy*
Ending Song: Moriogawa, and AmreeTakahara

Music
Ai Yori Aoshi OST
Ai Yori Aoshi Enishi OST

Sound Effects
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[Windy*]

Yaaay, it's out! ^^ You did a nice job with this, Elina~

CAST

OP - Tsuki, you're always improving, though your pronounciation always seems rather Americanized, mostly your vowels~ you have a sweet voice, though, so keep working on strengthening it. But you did well, it was pretty. ^.^

Kaoru - This seems like your usual typecast role, so I guess it fit pretty well. The scripting probably being a bit awkward made some of your line delivery awkward as well, but I don't really know whose fault that is. Maybe a combination of both. Sometimes it's hard to read your emotions, like when you're supposed to be cheerful or sad; you mostly just sounded serious all the time... I think it has a lot to do with you having such a heavy voice, but it could be something to work on. ^^; Watch your mic puffs, too.

Itsuki - Doesn't sound as old as he looks, but it's hard to get a really mature male voice like that. Your acting sounded natural and the voice was pleasant on the ears, though, so I liked it.

Aoi - Sweet, cute, just adorable. XD She sounded really young, but I don't know her character that well so it may or may not be fitting for her. You seemed to have her personality down, though - so sweet. *-* Some of your line deliveries, too, were a bit awkward and not totally natural-sounding, but it wasn't a huge glaring issue or anything.

Miyabi - Kitty, I love your sexy low voices <3 You sounded hot! But I will nitpick on your pronounciation and say "san" is pronounced more like "sahn" with a more open "ah" sound >3 Hee hee. Other than that... no complaints. o_o

Little girl/boy - Very cute children's voices. Rasha, you're great at those little boys!

Tina - Cute, though it seemed low for the character~ not too bad, though I think you could definitely use more energy and enthusiasm with this character. *nod*

Mayu - Ahahaha, you really cracked me up XDD IT'S A FIIIIREEE! Your energy was unmatched in the cast and your delivery was adorable. :3 I really wish you'd had a bigger part, because you shine here. ^.^

Chika - I imagined her having a higher, younger-sounding voice, but yours wasn't bad. Your delivery and energy are improving; she sounded energetic, which was good and suited her. ^_^

Taeko - You still suck. x_x AND YOU CAN'T ACT FOR CRAP.

ED - Wow, beautiful, you guys! I never imagined this as a duet, or haven't heard it as one, but it was just lovely - and sounded a lot like the two main characters were singing it. Amree always has a beautiful voice, and Moriogawa's went quite well with it. ^^ Good timing and pitch, you guys sound great together!

MIXING

Lovley job on the songs, for one; the synching on the ending was surpisingly good, though I think a better karaoke could've been made (I've done one that's higher quality, I think). In the start of the episode, it was totally silent, and I think since it showed an outdoors scene, you could've used some ambience SFX - like birds chirping or some other outdoor sounds, just to set the mood and place better. ^^ Also, Itsuki's lines needed noise reduction, though if I remember right you have a hard time doing that. Your use of SFX is really improving, and I noticed the effort. Some of them might need a little editing for length sometimes, though.

Volumes seemed pretty good, too, though some voices seemed a bit louder than others. Still, the music and SFX were good, and weren't overpowering. Nice attention to detail with things like echoes.

You already mentioned the lip synching being off, though, so I guess talking about that would be redundant... just keep working on it, I guess. ^^;;

I think this is some of your best producing to date, though, Elina, so keep it up! Hard work pays off ne~


OVERALL

A very decent production, and quality work on everyone's parts (except me >.>). Quite impressive. Great job, everyone! ^_^

[-Tsuki-]

Originally Posted by Windy*

OP - Tsuki, you're always improving, though your pronounciation always seems rather Americanized, mostly your vowels~ you have a sweet voice, though, so keep working on strengthening it. But you did well, it was pretty. ^.^

*cough* This was recorded about four to five months ago. XD

[Windy*]

Ahh, yea, that's right. XDD Sometimes I forget. That's why I sound like crap 8D But, my point that you have improved still stands~

[Kitty]

Yes..X3 This was before my voice changed. *shudders* And before I discovered noise reduction and Adobe Audition. *another shudder* Anyways, I'll have a full critique out soon. ^^

[-Tsuki-]

This production in general just seems so ooooooooooooold. x3

[anime_freakx1000]

I loved the cast!!! *-*!!! The only problem was that the lip-synching was off, but I loved everything else!

Good job everyone!!

[Kagome]

Opening Song: Tsuki/ its improving...^_^ I liked it anyway
Kaoru: Corey Maddox/ I liked it no complaints! just so many puffs >x<
Itsuki: MaskedDrifter/sounded a bit to young...and also the back ground noise destarcted me.
Aoi: Scarlotte/a little too high and young...But it was adorable
Miyabi: Kitty/ I loved it no complaints ^^
Little Girl: KStar/ i liked it
Little Boy: Rasha/ u scared me lol it was so loud XD but i liked it anyway
Tina: Moondust8765/ too young heheheh and not enough energy
Mayu: Morningstar_Smiles/ I liked it
Chika: Elina/a little forced?
Taeko: Windy*/ I like it but i think it was a bit too high for the character
Ending Song: Moriogawa, and AmreeTakahara/ i enjoyed it ^_^ just some words a mispronounced but i liked-ed it anyway ^____^

Mixing:.....um...it was ok but...one thing that threw me off was that...that animal that miyabi was holding...is a ferret...not a kitty...yea....oh and MOUTHFLAPS were off at times

overall: 3/5
~kagome<3<3<3

[Myokei-kun]

Hmmm, I really liked it. Some mouth flips were off, but other than that I liked it!

[Scheris]

i can't wait too see,im at the library right now but ill try to download it eventually...then ill leave a critique ^^