[Bebichu]

Hi.

Are you tired of my fandubs yet?

EDIT Video reuploaded.

CLANNAD

CLIP NOTES (READ FIRST)
I made the wind noise TOO loud at 1:56. Actually, I think I made a few SFX sound rather loud. >_<;;;; orz

I couldn't think of a title for this clip. Haha. Sorry for the lame naming job.

Download
http://youtube.com/watch?v=poy8Fq_ku_o (YouTube Streaming)

Cast
Button (Botan) - Berri
Kyou - mippa
Ryou - Rikka
Tomoya - Sukisho
Youhei - Pokop
Nagisa - Chinomi


BGM - CLANNAD OST, CLANNAD remix album -memento-
SFX - Findsounds.com, SoundDogs, original clip, VAA stuff :3

[Chinomi]

Really super dooper awesome. Playing Nagisa is soooo much fun, I can never get enough <3 EEEE~

Berri- Adorable! Sounds exactly like the original, hehe~
mippa- I've always loved your voice, no exception here. Fantastic voice for Kyou, really great.
Rikka- Cute Ryou! A bit hard to hear what you were saying at times, but most of the time it was nice and clear. Definitely a nice match for the shyer twin.
Sukisho- Always liked your Tomoya. If I had to pick out something to improve on, it'd be to act a tad more playful when communicating with Sunohara on the roof. But I really did love it.
Pokop- My first time hearing you! What a wonderful match for Sunohara! Your "Nice Idea" was EXACTLY like the original, I was like "woah~". Some parts needed a little bit more emotion, and the mic was muffled in places. Otherwise, a wonderful Sunohara. Best one I've heard so far I think
Chinomi- I actually liked my performance. [/world ends]

Fantastic mixing! I didn't even notice the loud wind.
And such a fun clip!

[mippa]

This was such an entertaining clip! I can't wait to see more from this! <3

Time for individual critiques:

Berri- So cute! <3 I agree, it's so much like the original, you put a lot of heart into the little piggy! <3
Rikka- Your Ryou is adorable. I could hear the awkwardness coming through in your performance, which is not easy to pull off! I agree, there was a spot in part 1:27 that I couldn't make out, but sometimes that might be due to script writing rather than performance, I'm not quite sure on this part. Your shocked gasping was definitely my favorite part. Mucho cuteness.
Sukisho- As usual, great delivery and a nice clear voice. You were especially impressive with certain lines that I personally would have trouble delivering, simply because they come across as difficult to me, but you keep them sounding believable. You sound a little older than what I imagine for Tomoya, but it still fits to me, so it might just be a matter of personal taste. ^^; I like my boys sounding young (cause I'm a dirty ol' lady), but your voice is still a really good match, so no crits there!
Pokop- Your voice suits the character perfectly--my only complaint is that I found your energy to be a bit lacking, especially when put up against the other characters. This improved as the clip continued. One you hit the two-minute mark, you were so on. Sunohara is a super-energetic character, arguably one of the most energetic in the show. It's okay to exaggerate in voice-acting--in fact, it's recommended. He is a very extreme character, so take your energy to the extreme, and you will have this guy nailed!!
Chinomi- I have always had trouble picturing Nagisa in English, but you solved that problem real easily! Really cute performance here, you suit the character well! You especially capture her airyness and youthfulness here, which is hard to do in the English language, if you ask me. A few nitpicks though--this might be due to lip-syncing, but there were a few lines here and there that sounded rather mechanic and stiff to me. It's really hard to put energy into a sickly character, I imagine...it might also be the scripting again...but try to watch the flow of your delivery a little more if you can.
Mippa- Yousuckgodie. But seriously, if I have any complaints about my performance, it's that I think I sound too old. Though to be perfectly honest, it's hard to say because I only have three-to-four lines, so I don't have much to work with.

Mixing/Overall: I found certain spots to be a little louder than others, making the spoken lines difficult to understand first time listening. Particularly when there was screaming/grunting involved. That's always hard. x.x I also think some of the lines--while fitting the lip sync just fine, sounded a little too "translated" and not quite natural. (Lines like "She's serious about this, so give her a serious answer, too." just sounds kind of awkward to me. My only other crit is that Ryou and Nagisa sound identical. This is nothing to do with the talent of the girls or anything, but it's really hard to tell who is saying what, and can get confusing, especially with off-screen lines. Maybe for future clips, some adjustment can be made to one of the voices to make a clearer distinction? Just a thought.

This was so much fun to do! <3 I hope you won't take my crits the wrong way. It was still very nicely done, I am just being nit-picky since I know more clips are on the way, and these are just simple things that could make the future clips even better! Great work, everyone!

[Sukisho]

Yay for it being done! I'll add more to this once I watch it.

Button (Botan) - Berri: SOOOO CUTE! You are always great with cute animal/creatures ^^

Kyou - mippa: Not really too much but I think you fit her pretty well. I guess your voice does have an older sound to it at with different parts you play but I don't really think it was bad on her. Definatly could feel the anger/hate flowing so that was good ^^

Ryou - Rikka: I can't think of much to say that probably hasn't alreayd been said other than you're always great with soft-spoken shy characters like Ryou.

Tomoya - Sukisho: ME...You know I like him the more I play him, but I still find him to be a rather dull character for some reason (lol).

Youhei - Pokop: WOAH! A NEW VOICE... those are always nice ^^ Your voice definatly works well for him, and you can get the engery that he needs but like Mippa & Chinomi said, it could still use a bit more at times. Some of it sounded kind of dull in the beginning but as it went on it definatly got better! I loved the sounds when he got him by Tomoya or grabbed by Kyou and the "Nice Idea" did sound very similar to the original.

Nagisa - Chinomi: Wonderful nagisa as always. I really can't think of much to say cause I really find you to fit her very well ^^

Mixing: I thought the mix sounded pretty good, maybe just a few volumes that made some it hard to understand like Mippa said but other than that I found it pretty good.

Originally Posted by mippa

I like my boys sounding young (cause I'm a dirty ol' lady)

Don't we all Glad ya still liked it ^^

Originally Posted by Chinomi

Sukisho- Always liked your Tomoya. If I had to pick out something to improve on, it'd be to act a tad more playful when communicating with Sunohara on the roof. But I really did love it.

Yeah the lines they have with each other were giving me some problems I guess, since I'm really not use to characters that interact in the playful way that they do. So definatly have to work with that more since they do that alot in the series.

[Bebichu]

Sorry, all, if you already added the video to your favorites on YouTube. ^^; Some of the loud SFX was bugging me, so I went back and tried to fix whatever could be fixed and lowered the volumes of a few things. I'm not sure if it's even that noticeable of the difference. (I'll probably be the only one to notice it... XD;; ) Please don't beat me up. :<

*will re-upload soon*

mippa -
O_O I didn't think you sounded too old. I thought you did sound like her in those few lines, imo.
I think a way I can distinguish Rikka's Ryou from Chinomi's Nagisa is that Ryou sounds a tad higher, and maybe a bit more airier than Nagisa.
About the volumes, when I mix, I try to match volumes with the original clip. Whenever a character was shown standing far away, volume seemed to be lower (and I added a VERY small echo). Then I made the volume higher whenever it showed them close. I guess I could've raised the "far-away" voices a little bit more so they could be heard. Either that, the BGM could've been the problem. (was it that loud?) I had trouble deciding on the volumes because I wanted the music to be heard too. @_@;
And I'll try to do better on my scripting. I think I have that "translated" problem a lot. XD;

[Pokop]

I think everyone did pretty good on this! n.n I think all voices matched the characters pretty well! X3
And thank you everyone! I will do my best to take the advice and apply to other fandubs later on. ^^ I really hope I can be accepted...and that you all can give me another few chances.
XP;;

[Kyoko Mogami]

Wow~! ^^; all the voices matched really well~!

[Haushinka]

This was so cute! I really loved it, and all the casting choices fit wonderfully.

[StripedStockings]

I've never seen this show...but now I kinda' want to.
<3
When the blond boy was like, "Since I'm a good guy."
I thought he was going to say, "Since I'm a gay guy."
My mind is so broken this late at night.
@_@