''Woe'' A Minecraft Horror Series.

[Cyberwhite94]

Hi VAA,

I've started a big project with the Name ''Woe'' Its a Minecraft horror series.
I'm gonna upload every week one episode (one season has 3 Episodes).

Backgroundstory:

''Mario and "Steve" was strandet in a strange Island. There was nothing except Water.They have built a House and a Farm where they live.
At one Day Steve was gone and Mario was gonna searching him.But all what he has found was this strange Cave.''


Teaser:

[Cyberwhite94]

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[Captain_Irish]

What characters do you want us to audition for?

[Cyberwhite94]

in this season I don't need another Voice Actor but in Season 2 I would like to have 2 Voice Actors.




Luis he is a anxious man but really courageous
He is 17 years old and have a young voice.


Luis:''Hey did you see this? There is a house and a Farm in this Island. Maybe there are another survivors?


Luis:''Peter! Just watch behind you!''


Peter is fearles but he has a heart.
He is 18 years old and dares everything.


Peter:''Yes I can see the House.It would be nice to see another survivors.


Peter:''Oh God whats that? There is a signpost. ''I was looking for my Brother and then I've found this strange Cave.If anyone read this you won't come out of here. This is one of my will.''
Okay I admit it here is really scary.


Episode 1 is out:

[Cyberwhite94]

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[Soulgig]

This was a good episode there were a few things I saw overall.

Cyberwhite94: Your english is very good. The only problem was one word where "ladder" sounded like "letter" but that's more of a nitpick

Mixing: I didn't find anything off, most everything sounded where it should be.

Scripting: There's some small repetitive moments in your script which can sometimes get a tad bit grating after awhile, but that's not a serious problem. The only other thing I saw on scripting was one moment where you stated the obvious "This cave is scary" while I don't know if you were going for a "thinking" line sometimes this is best left to the viewer's imagination as the name of the series and the look makes the viewer already know it's a scary cave and stating it in the script may grate on the viewer for different reasons.

Camera: Sometimes the camera is a bit shaky at parts. The thing I've been told is sometimes shaking is better less than more as no one will complain usually if there's less shaking but more will. Also there a few times where we can't visually see what's happening when it's stated. (This may be due to Minecraft more than you) Two examples are the trap line as we don't really see a trap so we don't really know how the character knew that. The other example is at the very last few seconds we don't see what happens (Which may have been the point) so as the viewer I didn't know if he got pushed off or he jumped off.


On terms of thread you may want to put both videos on top because people don't usually scroll down for more videos. You may also want to put a cast list (even if it's you) so people know as some users on here don't like to click an extra page for a cast list when they can watch the video on this page. Finally you'll probably want to put (or leave) lines in the auditions and casting forums as no one really looks for those in a completed works thread.

Overall it was entertaining so keep up the good work!

[Cyberwhite94]

Wow thanks for the constructive Feedback it helps me really much.