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  1. #1 If you picked this book up and read the prologue, would you be interested? 
    Hi, I'm SeraphicShadows, and in an attempt to become active on these forums, I decided I want to share a project I've been working on- a novel. i've provided you with the prologue I have written out and would very much like Critique/Ti[s/ anything really. Please and Thank you!

    The Name of the book is Currently to be called 'Resonance'

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  2. #2 Re: If you picked this book up and read the prologue, would you be interested? 
    LEGEN...wait for it...DARY Adam's Avatar
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    It's not bad. Started off a little slow for a prologue and there's a lot of mistakes that can detract from the read. There's a lot of instances where two words "arestuck" together. You need to pay attention to things like that when writing. Make sure the proper space is between each word.

    Marisa turned a corner, ducking low toavoid the lid, and sliced with her dagger. The old lady howled... and suddenly became un- old- lady=like as the creatures illousion disappeared. "A skelleton." Marisa said, pushing it away."A corpse re animated by spirits wanting revenge. I'm glad I caught you before you could begin a serial killing streak."
    This one is an example of where there's a lot of spelling mistakes. While it's natural to miss things here and there during the initial process, there's a lot within two sentences. You need to pay more attention or at least run a spell checker.

    Prologues are supposed to be a little more fast paced in the beginning. It's what draws in your reader and this one while it picked up towards the end, it started off a bit slow and rough. It might have been because there was a lot of little things that took away from the process of reading. It has potential but it just needs to be cleaned up. Try smoother transition, using different adjectives to describe the environment, etc.
    Click the image to purchase the novel for $2.99 Any support is greatly appreciated. If you do purchase, let me know and I will send you a free download of the original soundtrack and an audio thank you from some members of the cast.








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