Well, I just finished having this mixed a couple minutes ago actually. So, enjoy the reel!
Mixed by Neil Holmes and the Voice Creative team.
This actually made me pretty happy just because I could hear you taking advice from your previous reel and applying it to several of your voices. It definitely took a step up, although I could still hear a couple things that stood out. I'm sure someone can articulate what I'm trying to say more clearly (pfft, again) but this is the gist of what I felt:
The first line seemed a little disjointed between statements. If someone's talking about "smooth sailing from here," they probably went through something in contrast before that moment and probably feel relieved. Sure, there was a sigh, but it shouldn't stop there. It could be slowed down and played out to the fullest relaxation (which also eats into the long silence I didn't feel added very much). Or giddiness! That's what I started to hear towards the end of the second statement, but not enough that I was convinced. It left me a little confused as to what your character was supposed to feel or think. Is he by himself? With a loved one? The father of a family? I want to hear context out of your acting.
"What about the promise you made to mom?" pulled me out of the moment. It sounds like someone reminding their little brother to take out the trash rather than maintaining the gravitas of the previous statement. "Get up there and show them what you're made of" sounded bored rather than inspiring. I think you're trying to go for a natural take but it sounds like a serious enough issue to warrant a bit more tension in your voice.
It sounds like you changed the line with this one, and it's much more coherent. Yay! The only thing was "I'll be courteous", which I thought you could've played with a little more so as to sound like he's actually going to show some mercy. That way, the options he gives and the laugh sound all the more menacing.
There's still something about the next line I don't quite like but I can't put my finger on it. But it is an improvement if my memory serves me right!
Is the b in "club" cut off at the end, or was it just not pronounced?
I definitely heard more tension in your voice this time. I might've gone in another direction so you can show off more of your acting chops (better to overdo it than under, because people will know you're at least capable of that level and you can always kick it down a couple notches), but it's a respectable line; sounds like he's playing a game, maybe.
I can't remember how long your previous one was, but somehow this feels awfully short and maybe it's because none of these particularly stood out. They're good, and they've definitely improved, but I wouldn't consider this a great demo. Still, you're showing improvement, which makes me happy because it shows you can take direction and you're capable of going even further, which is a definite plus for me in terms of considering actors.
Thank you, Monotori! I'm glad I'm showing improvement, that's something I'm not always sure of.
Unfortunately, a lot of the "problems" are also due to some of the editing process, and Neil taking out some of my voices, because he didn't think they'd represent me well. Not to say he didn't do a good job, and not to say that a bulk of it wasn't just acting problems, but just thought I'd make you aware of that.
I'll definitely try working on this more sometime, or possibly just completely new lines. Thanks again!
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