[Another] Bone Work

[TylerDanielz]

WHAT...THE...****?! WHAT JUST HAPPENED XDDD I never saw this anime but ok enough of that

Boy: JESUS CHRIST YOUR ACTING WAS AMAZING! YOUR SCREAM BROUGHT IT ALL TOGETHER, REALLY WELL DELIVERED AND YOU FEAR WAS GENUINE I AM COMPLETELY IN AWE!

Girl: She matched the mysterious persona of this character, very well done and very balanced

Mixing: Bloody...and very disgusting...Keep up the good work ^^

Thank you for your critique

[Kiramaru16]

More of a compliment and praise if anything XDDDD

[TylerDanielz]

Just posted Another clip

[TsukinoKei]

Great job with the new clip! It`s such an honour to be working with such an amazing talented cast.
Tomohiko Kazami was such a challenge, compared to the characters I usually voice.

Time for my critique!


Kouichi Sakakibara:
Bravo! I really felt you portrayed the emotion very well for this character. I felt your voice sounded very close to the Japanese, with a touch of your own take.
The only nitpick I would have would be to try giving Kouichi a little more emotion with his first few lines. Your character just woke up with three complete strangers in his room, He would be a little more freaked out, I mean I know I would be like "Who the hell are you" I also noticed you missed a line which sounded a bit wrong but it made Izumi, Tomohiko, and Yukari look a lot more creepy.
Nicely done!

Sanae Mizuno
Wow, I have never heard of Fmaluvr13, but I think she did a great job. For having two lines, she really portrayed the character very well.
The only nitpick would be on one of your lines, "You'll love it" I think it could of had a bit more emotion since it was one of her favourite books. When I heard this line this was the first thing that came to mind. Great job, I'm looking forward to hearing your character with more dialogue.

Izumi Akazawa:
Shudo was the perfect choice for this character, the voice really worked and she portrayed the emotion very well. The only nitpick I would have would be on one line. I noticed when
Tomohiko is about to clue Kouichi about the curse, Izumi's face expression looks angry & annoyed. When I heard your line, It didn't capture the emotion that I was expecting. But that is just a little nit pick. Great job! I look forward to hearing more of your Izumi.

Yukari Sakuragi:
I really enoyed Midnight_Melody's take on this character, It was perfect! The only nitpick I would have would be, some of your lines peaked a bit such as the p's which can't be helped but just try to watch out for that. I have headphones that hear everything. I can't wait to hear more of Midnight_Melody's Yukari, I've never heard of her before but I will definitely make sure to keep an eye out. Keep it up!

Tomohiko Kazami:
Blah, just awful... Whoever voiced this guy did a terrible job. I am just kidding, I would love to hear everyone's critiques on my performance.



Mixing/Editing:
Your mixing was very well done but there were a few things that could be fixed. I noticed Kouichi's lines in the beginning of the clip were kind of low and hard to hear. I understand he is far away from the screen but it could of been turned up a bit more. I know exactly what you are saying since I read the script, but some others may not.
Another thing that stood out to me was, one of Yukari's lines. "Um, here these are for you" was a tad too high but that's just me being picky... Overall, I really thought your mixing and sfx sounded pro!

Script:
I usually don't critique on scripts, but I thought I should since some of you're lines you wrote didn't quite match some of the lip movements. Sometimes the Japanese dialogue are much shorter when they
speak, so when you translate it to English, you want to make sure the lip movements work. However I can't really say much since I noticed this happens a lot with English dubs. A good way to look at it would be, this is just a FANDUB and not the real thing. But try watching out for that.

And that is my really long critique, I noticed a lot of people don't really take the time to critique but I can see why, since it takes sooo long. Anyway great job with the clip~ Looking forward to seeing more.

[TylerDanielz]

Great job with the new clip! It`s such an honour to be working with such an amazing talented cast.
Tomohiko Kazami was such a challenge, compared to the characters I usually voice.

Time for my critique!


Kouichi Sakakibara:
Bravo! I really felt you portrayed the emotion very well for this character. I felt your voice sounded very close to the Japanese, with a touch of your own take.
The only nitpick I would have would be to try giving Kouichi a little more emotion with his first few lines. Your character just woke up with three complete strangers in his room, He would be a little more freaked out, I mean I know I would be like "Who the hell are you" I also noticed you missed a line which sounded a bit wrong but it made Izumi, Tomohiko, and Yukari look a lot more creepy.
Nicely done!

Izumi Akazawa:
Shudo was the perfect choice for this character, the voice really worked and she portrayed the emotion very well. The only nitpick I would have would be on one line. I noticed when
Tomohiko is about to clue Kouichi about the curse, Izumi's face expression looks angry & annoyed. When I heard your line, It didn't capture the emotion that I was expecting. But that is just a little nit pick. Great job! I look forward to hearing more of your Izumi.

Yukari Sakuragi:
I really enoyed Midnight_Melody's take on this character, It was perfect! The only nitpick I wchallenould have would be, some of your lines peaked a bit such as the p's which can't be helped but just try to watch out for that. I have headphones that hear everything. I can't wait to hear more of Midnight_Melody's Yukari, I've never heard of her before but I will definitely make sure to keep an eye out. Keep it up!

Tomohiko Kazami:
Blah, just awful... Whoever voiced this guy did a terrible job. I am just kidding, I would love to hear everyone's critiques on my performance.



Mixing/Editing:
Your mixing was very well done but there were a few things that could be fixed. I noticed Kouichi's lines in the beginning of the clip were kind of low and hard to hear. I understand he is far away from the screen but it could of been turned up a bit more. I know exactly what you are saying since I read the script, but some others may not.
Another thing that stood out to me was, one of Yukari's lines. "Um, here these are for you" was a tad too high but that's just me being picky... Overall, I really thought your mixing and sfx sounded pro!

Script:
I usually don't critique on scripts, but I thought I should since some of you're lines you wrote didn't quite match some of the lip movements. Sometimes the Japanese dialogue are much shorter when they
speak, so when you translate it to English, you want to make sure the lip movements work. However I can't really say much since I noticed this happens a lot with English dubs. A good way to look at it would be, this is just a FANDUB and not the real thing. But try watching out for that.

And that is my really long critique, I noticed a lot of people don't really take the time to critique but I can see why, since it takes sooo long. Anyway great job with the clip~ Looking forward to seeing more.

Thank you for your loooooong critique.. Means a lot.

[TylerDanielz]

Bump for the night

[TsukinoKei]

This thread needs more critiques. Bumpty bump~

[Midnight_Melody]

The clips sound amazing! I feel so privileged to be working with such an outstanding cast ^ ^ I thought everyone's voices worked very well with their character and the performances were solid. (I'm excluding myself from this. I'm always nitpicky with my own performances.)

The only nitpick I wchallenould have would be, some of your lines peaked a bit such as the p's which can't be helped but just try to watch out for that.

I didn't notice that when I was recording, but I'm totally hearing it now. I'll try to reduce that in the future. Thanks for the critique!

[TylerDanielz]

The clips sound amazing! I feel so privileged to be working with such an outstanding cast ^ ^ I thought everyone's voices worked very well with their character and the performances were solid. (I'm excluding myself from this. I'm always nitpicky with my own performances.)



I didn't notice that when I was recording, but I'm totally hearing it now. I'll try to reduce that in the future. Thanks for the critique!

It's a pleasure to work with you. Ill be sending the script for the next clip very soon, so look forward to that.

[JVSP_The Real One]

Great scene! xD I have my suspicions on many things regarding Kouichi. Gotta start watching the show. .3.

Kouichi Sakakibara: TylerDanielz- I love how much you portrayed this character. The way you made Kouichi sound so calm and reserved towards the other characters was awesome. He sounded very mysterious and your voice displayed an almost other worldly feeling. In this scene there wasn't much emotion to the character but you were able to fulfill his character and the acting was spot on. I wanted to hear a more medium-low tone to his voice rather than a medium-high but it's only a personal opinion. Also how you made your voice sound like you just woke up was great. I believed I was right there in the scene. Again, great job! .3.

Izumi Akazawa: ShudoRanmaru- I love the strength and confidence in your voice when you voiced Izumi. She certainly is the strongest out of the three when it comes to taking control of the conversation and you nailed her personality perfectly. I love how you switched from formal and kind to interrogating and suspicious while playing her. There is a lot of spirit in your voice over and you always just seem to bring life to the characters you play. The acting was also very good! No complaints here. .3.

Yukari Sakuragi: Midnight_Melody- Very sweet, gentle, and mysterious is her character. Your voice suited Yukari well. The amount of emotion and talent you brought to her character was great. Your voice at times sounded like it was holding back something but maybe that's how the character feels in this scene. Definitely someone I will be watching from now on in future scenes. Great Job! You have amazing talent. ;3

Sanae Mizuno: Fmaluvr13- To be honest, your voice was my favorite out of everybody in this scene ^^. It had a jolly, almost best friend feel to it. Even though you had only a few lines at the start of the scene. Your voice truly had a wonderful presence and the amount of talent you showed voicing this role is ridiculously entertaining to listen to. I have now become your fanboy. Don't question it, just accept it! :3

Tomohiko Kazami: BrandonM- As always, truly a very talented VA. The acting and essence to your character were spot on. My favorite part in the scene is when Tomohiko is going to spill the beans on something to Kouichi but then gets silenced by Izumi. I felt you captured his reactions quite well. I didn't like the nerdy tone in his voice but then again that's just my preference. Other than that, you nailed this scene and I always look forward to hearing you in these projects. Keep up the Great Work! ;p