Short Story- Christmas Love- Sakura Hughes And Eric Ng Radio Play ^_^

[YumeiroFanDub]

Welcome! This is my first radio play with Sakura Hughes! BTW FOR THE VOICE NATSU IM REALLY SORRY THAT I SUCK IM REALLY NEW! My 2nd time voice acting and my mic sucks! The music was really hard to choose so yea! There be a download link later but right now I only youtube version! If you want the download link wait about 1 day I need to sleep after this LMFAO! So here it is and all the credit is at the end!

Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bTKEQFuxKUo


Should I make a series out of this?

[Stephanie W]

Interesting job, but needs a lot of work.

Mixing: This needs the most work. It was like you just put the lines in as they were and didn't fix the volume levels or the spacing. This led to me almost dieing hearing loud lines then hearing really really quiet lines. With all the spaces between the replies of lines, it didn't sound normal. After all, no one waits 2+ seconds before replying (unless they're thinking, but I assume you know what I mean). Also, you should add some effect when characters are thinking. Since this isn't a visual project, people wouldn't know when someone is thinking or speaking. And if you just leave the lines as they are (with no effect), people would assume they're speaking.

YumeiroFanDub//Natsu: Your acting needs a lot of work. When he's angry, he should sound angry. It sounds like you're just reading the lines. You should also invest in another microphone because I could barely (and when I say barely, I mean BARELY) hear you. If you really want to take this up as a serious hobby/job then you need to spend the money and get a better microphone. Most of your lines sounded robotic and like you were reading. I know you say that you're new, but you need to break out of your shell (who cares if people hear you). Your accent also gets in the way a lot of times.

Taylor//Akane: Perfect role for you.

Sakura//Amane: You sound nasally, I don't mean to offend you, you just sound different than what I normally hear. Your emotion was a little weak in a few places, and it seemed like she should have sounded a little b*tchier.

Samantha//Hana: I've never really pictured you being the bad guy, but it was an interesting role for you.

Myself//Miki: My lines were really loud and made me cringe every time I spoke. Not my fault, the mixer's fault. Aside from that, there were some lines I wish I had paid more attention to and redone. I made Miki sound annoying, I hope no one gets annoyed by it, though. I dun really know what else to say about myself, haha, so I hope someone critiques me.


As for this becoming a series, I think YumeiroFanDub should spend more time working on his acting. The mixing also needs to be improved drastically. Honestly, I wouldn't watch it because I had to keep adjusting the volume levels as I listened. A viewer shouldn't have to do that, they should just sit back and listen to what's going on and not have to worry about their ears being raped.

I hope this critique didn't sound too harsh, but sometimes you have to take the blow to know how to improve.

[YumeiroFanDub]

Yes Stephanie I know that the volume adjustment. I was kind of rushing I don't have enough time. For my voice Natsu This is my second time voice acting so Im a nooby >.<!

[YumeiroFanDub]

And for the microphone Im planning to get a new one so dont worry and it kinda of hard for me to use moition >.< My accent is a big problem for me too.

[Sakura Hughes]

Sakura//Amane: You sound nasally, I don't mean to offend you, you just sound different than what I normally hear. Your emotion was a little weak in a few places, and it seemed like she should have sounded a little b*tchier.

Yeah, cuz see I have allergies to dustmites (dust) which effects my noise extremely. When I usually record for something, i sound non nasally right? Thats cuz I go on this food diet which improves my allergies, at the time I recorded this, I was off my diet so the result was extremely nasally. As for emotion, it was really hard for me to sound younger (in middle school) since i['m a 3rd year in high school. So I think i focused too much on that then the emotion, but thanks for the critique (: