[ShinStarPro] Fairy Tail: "Natsu Vs Bora"

[Seymour]

Cast (IOA)
Thug 1- D3mo
Bora- LucariosKlaw
Happy- Bree
Natsu- Seymour
Lucy- RachelMichelle
Thug 2- Seymour

Mixed, Scripted by Seymour
Music, Newgrounds, Legend of Zelda Windwaker OST, F Zero (yea I know)
Sound effects, Voice Acting Alliance Sound Library

Feedback is always appreciated

[Seymour]

UGGGH, glitchy video, going to redo and re-release

[Seymour]

UGGGH, glitchy video, going to redo and re-release

Good to go

[D3mo]

Good stuff, I've been looking forward to this clip for a long time, and it more than delivered!

Thanks for letting me be a part of it, Bro

[Seymour]

bumping up for the day

[The Pawt]

Just leaving a little comment here to remind me to leave a nice and proper critique tomorrow~ ;D

[Bree]

I'm sorry.
No seriously this is my favorite show
Long critique ahead.
TURNBACKNOW.

EXTRAS//D3mo & Seymour : Believeable, comedic, well played! I really liked them, and they added dimension to the scene for sure!

BORA//LucariosClaw : I really like the exaggeration you brought to this He had a really fitting tone that was showy and cocky, and the calling of his attack showed this well. I can't think of much more to say, I really loved you in this role and I loved how you acted it! Great Job! Did I mention I really like your voice? I need to see more of you!

HAPPY//Bree: THAT ONE LIP FLAP grah. I tacked on a small boyish rasp to this take of Happy and I'm, at least at the moment, liking how it sounded. I still think my enunciation isn't as strong as it could be though, and I should work on that more in voices like these.

NATSU//Seymour: I'm really conflicted in how I feel about your performance as Natsu. I think that some of it comes from the scripting, and being so in love with the show it left me sorta confused. You're deffintely not Tetsuya Kakihara, and I felt like your voice may be a bit too heavy for Natsu. I think my favorite line and delivery from you was "is that all you got?" You really nailed his character in this line, it was cocky and light, and higher placed in your range. "I should thank you for the meal though..." Sounded so...shadow Kanji? XD Haha! You said your line wrong....It's um "I'm all fired up" But I'll excuse you. For now. I have to give you props on your grunting and attacking, they were really great! I would have liked to have seen you take it a bit farther though and give him some noises for when he's inhaling in Bora's magic. 'Take this!' was in that higher range, I think you need to expand on that and stay higher if you ever voice Natsu again. I see you sink lower frequently, and when yell you go down and sink into a lower, gruff voice. While some roles, this is great, you need to be open to letting it out in a higher scream. Natsu, and other younger protagionist I'm sure you'll encounter, still have that crack in there voice when they're yelling, attacking, and getting emotional. Try to work your voice and see if you can scream and go higher instead of gruff and low, and I think you'll discover a cool medium with those teenage voice cracks.

LUCY//RachelleMichelle: I felt like you were very frail sounding, and sort of breathy. I can excuse this, seeing as Lucy was about to be like date raped, but I think you should really put some more power and precense behind your voice for Lucy. Go loud and wild! She's very outspoken, dynamic and silly! She's seeing all this crazy magic for the first time, she's in disbelief and is like WAIT WHAT! WO WO WO REWIND PLEASE! She's the 'straight man' of the group. I like the "...and attack with fire..." part of your line, it sounded so " good grief are you serious?!" Overall, you had good acting but you sounded very quiet, and a bit higher pitched and girly/frail. Don't be afraid to speak up and hold a strong character precense! I would love to see you do a scene that demands something like this- being loud and dynamic!

MIXING: I thought it was good! Some SFX seemed to stand out, like that little sound after Happy said something along the lines of "you didn't have to overdo it...". I was suprised with the music choices, and I found them to fit decently- more then I expected. However I think the original fairy tail OST would have given it a bit more power as a scene. thenagainidohaveaslightcrushonthatOST.... I also though I sounded a bit loud compared to Rachelle. Perhaps it's just my LOUD BOOMING VOICE

SCRIPTING: Interesting for sure. I liked how you changed some things and took some liberties, but as a big fairy tail fan I was disappointed at the removal of a few gimmicks here and there. As a stand alone clip though it was great, and the liberties really came together to make it really stand apart for the japanese original.

I'm Sorry T_T

In all seriousness though, thank you so much for the opportunity to be a part of this clip! It was a pleasure to be able to be in a clip with all of you <3

-Bree

[Seymour]

Daaaaang Bree, good critique ya got there, taking notes on it

Bumping up for the evening

[Seymour]

Buuumping up, yet again.

[KepoQ]

Nice! =D good job everyone!