Feb. 2011 demo

[Seeshelle]

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oh, shizz.. when was the last time I made a demo? 1-2 years ago? hrm, hrm..
I'll cut the pessimistic talk and just say I didn't really care about range for the demo. I'm more focused on the acting, so hope it doesn't suck. I left out some BGM because didn't know what to put with the voice and emotion.
..Do I still slur, guys? D: Please leave positive and constructive criticism ! (;

BGM
03 - Tanoshiku Genki no Yoi Kyoku wo Akatsuki Sensei ga Tsukuri Mashita
03 - Unchiku dayo, Lucky Star
06 - Kanata no Theme
Ideal Lover Instrumental
Leona Lewis - My Hands Karaoke
When It Rains - Paramore Piano Tribute

Was hesitant to put Playing God for the angry line.

[emmych]

You have a nice vocal pitch! Very innocent and sweet.
One thing I could say, though, is don't be afraid to give your voice that little extra bit of oomph. Breath support is key!
Also, work on your pronunciation. It's a little difficult to understand what you're saying sometimes, especially your Ts. Make sure to speak very clearly.
Other than that, though, nice work!

[Seeshelle]

You have a nice vocal pitch! Very innocent and sweet.
One thing I could say, though, is don't be afraid to give your voice that little extra bit of oomph. Breath support is key!
Also, work on your pronunciation. It's a little difficult to understand what you're saying sometimes, especially your Ts. Make sure to speak very clearly.
Other than that, though, nice work!

Yeah, breath support is a problem in my singing, but didn't notice it came out in th reel. x3
I knew I still needed to work on pronunciation, but no one said anything so I wasn't sure.
Thanks!

[Seeshelle]

Bump for the birthday girl? ..it was actually yesterday, but still.. x3

[Koichi_Saito]

Voice 1- Not sure what kind of emotion you were going for with this, but I assume you're talking to someone who's passed on? Anyway, it just seemed like you were listing things, and I couldn't get a good grasp on whatever character you were trying to make with this line. Also, you sort of rushed through, so I couldn't hear half of what you said even after repeating it for the third time. Your first voice should be one of your strongest lines which will grab the attention of the audience. Never forget that.

Voice 2- Not sure what line this was either, since your acting remained static the entire time. For certain characters, it's hard not to remain static, but I don't think that was your intention with this one. It sounded as if the line was supposed to be a touching statement, but it kind of gave the opposite feeling.

Voice 3- Was that supposed to be...threatening? Put some evil music, a more angry tone, something that would get that across.

Voice 4- Uh... Couldn't really understand what the heck you said, so no real comment.

Voice 5- Now we have a girl infatuated with someone. Problem: I did not believe that one bit.

Voice 6- Seductress? It could've been a lot better with a sultry, mature woman voice and the right emotion.

Voice 7- This is the only line where I could catch a glimpse of acting.

Overall- Okay, not to sound rude or demeaning, but every voice sounded the same. I know you stated that you were not going for range, but a little variety would not hurt at all. Also, you remained static throughout almost all of your lines. This pretty much means that you did not sound believable and did not ACT out your character. It was more like you were reading lines off a paper. Mixing music was good, but you should put in some SFX in your demo, make things more interesting. Enunciate a bit and try to speak a little more clearly in your lines instead of slurring words together. It was hard to decipher the meaning in all of your lines due to the one-shot acting, so my suggestion would be to take an acting class of some sort.

This critique was not meant to insult or to demean you, it was only meant to help you. You have a nice voice, but you need more than just one voice to voice act. Take some acting lessons and I'm sure you'll do worlds better from this in the future.