[Whimsical Pro] PSG - "Are You On A Diet?!"

[Jordan]

Episode 4 Fandub Clip - "Are You On A Diet?!"

(By the way, no sexual situations/innuendos or extremely foul language in this clip).
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Cast:

Panty - Jordan
Stocking - Bree
Chuck - TriPredRavage

Music: "Tenga Step" - PSG OST, "2001 Space Odyessy Theme," and "Skip" - Pandora Hearts OST

SFX: VAA SFX Library, FreeSound.org

Thanks to Sukisho for providing me with the raw episode!
Comments and critiques appreciated!

[Cydonia]

OHMYGOD. SO GOOD.

Jordan//Panty - You fit Panty SO well! I love your voice on her! The "Peekaboo!" part was so well done! X333 I loved it so much! I honestly can't nitpick at your performance here.

Bree//Stocking - I... like your acting here, but I think that your voice is a bit too high for Stocking. I think that Stocking has a pretty mature side to her, and I don't really like her having a cutesy voice. But that's just me. X3 Watch your enunciation when you're speaking really fast, though, as I couldn't make out what you were saying when Stocking was all highspeed. Other than that, I reeeeally liked this performance, too! :3

TriPredRavage//Chuck - I couldn't stop laughing. XDDD I honestly don't think that anyone could top that. So funny! Really well done!

Mixing - Fab-OO-lass as we say in Welshland! :3

[Seymour]

Looolz, loved that scene

Now then let's begin,

Jordan as Panty, I'll admit, I was skeptical about you playing Panty, but I gotta say, after hearing this, I'm mighty impressed, I specially loved the 'Peekaboo' bit.

Bree as Stocking, ehhhhhh, it was alright, but not exactly what I wouldve shot for in Stocking's character, it was a little too high for her age and personality, a much more softer and dark tone would've suited her more, but that's just me. As for the acting, it was good, but it sounded way too echoy and fast for me to pick up on some chunks of what Stocking was saying, try to snag a more isolated area to record next time.

TriPredRavage as Chuck, chuck chuuuuck chuck chuck...ahem, very very damn good impression of Chuck.

Mixing wise, very well done nothing to critique.

[BloodRedOath]

Hahahaha I liked this.

Jordan/Panty: Very well done, the attitude was hysterical lol. I think your voice fits pretty well too, maybe it's a smidge too deep or mature, but it still worked for me in this clip at least. Good job!

Bree/Stocking: I've been waiting to hear you as stocking since the show came out, and I think you did really well here too! I do have to agree with Cydonia though, I think the voice was a little too high. Like, she's a little girl, but at least in my mind, it's a little deeper. Other than that, I loved the laugh and the acting in general lol.

TriPredRavage/Chuck: Oh god, that was a little too good of a performance lol. I still don't like chuck, but you did his weird-ass noises well xD

Mixing: Damn good, nothing seemed like it was missing sfx or anything like that. The lip flaps were a tad weird because of the way they looked, but making that look natural is fuckin' hard with a show like this where the lip flaps actually change. (Tongue stinking out sometimes, lips pursing sometimes, etc.) Otherwise, I liked it!

[Bree]

Yay! It's out!

Jordan/Panty: I loved it =3 It was really fitting, and I loved your Peekaboo line! I hope you do some more as her, you really captured her edge and got me laughing

TPR/Chuck: Oh man. Oh man. That was perfect.

Myself/Stocking: Eh. I was hesitant with what I did here, and had asked several times if Jordan was sure she was okay with it. I don't know what happened with my computer, but it's been distorting my mic quality more and more and more. Luckily I have a fix for it now ^^. I couldn't even understand the last line myself at first since it was distorted D;. I think my acting was good, but I could have softened it a bit more then going higher, not sure how my other takes were. But for what it was, it wasn't bad. I'll be sure to take the pointers given if I voice Stocking again =3 Thanks everyone for your feedback <3

Mixing: I loved it XD It was true to the show with all the silly noises.

-Bree

[Kennidy]

HI GUYS IM HERE TO REPORT THIS THREAD BECAUSE PSG FANDUBS ARE NOT ALLOWED ON THE VAA!! PLEASE TAKE THE LINK DOWN IMMEDIATELY BECAUSE ITS NOT ALLOWED HERE!!!!

Alright. Enough kidding. Critique time.

Jordan, your Panty felt very masculine-sounding here. Not saying that she sounds like a man, but she does have a very deep, boyish feel with the voice that you chose for her. Panty is a huge whore. She's a slut. Because of this, I'd imagine her with a more feminine voice and a seductive undertone--even when she deals with her little sister. On top of that, Panty is a total bitch. Because of this, she doesn't care about her fanboys in the slightest (unless she can have sex with them) and picks on her little sister a lot.

Earlier in the episode, I remember Panty saying something about Stocking getting fat. Although it isn't shown on screen, I think Panty remembers what she said and notices Stocking's reactions to her talking about the sweets. So, she continues on with talking about the sweets and teases her more and more with it (i.e., describing the sweets in great detail, feeding it to Chuck, asking her about being on a diet, etc.) However, I really didn't hear that build up at all, at least not until Panty asked her, "What's wrong? ARE YOU ON A DIET!?" I kind of wished I had heard something like that in your performance, but that's just my nitpick.

As for Bree's Stocking, I have to agree with everyone else. The voice felt a little high and childish. Even though Stocking is the younger of the siblings, she is also the most mature. She's the more intelligent and more collected one of the two. When I suggested you to Jordan, I was hoping that you'd use something similar to your regular voice. I think because of the voice you chose, improper enunciation, and microphone issues caused a lot of your lines to be incomprehensible. I really couldn't understand a thing you said after the freak out. But before that, I really liked the acting. Nice job! Just watch that voice next time!

I wish I had heard more of TriPredRavage's Chuck, though. He should do a fandub of one of the parts of Chuck to the Future sometime, haha.

As for the mixing and scripting, I'm too lazy to critique it. XD; Basically, just what everyone said so far. I thought the music choices especially were superb!

I hope you guys do more clips in the future. ^^

EDIT: Does anyone else notice Katz from Courage on Panty's shirt? HEH.

[Jordan]

Thanks for the critiques, everyone!

@ Kennidy: Yeah, now that you point it out, I guess I did sound a little tomboyish or something. That probably sort of unintentionally happened when I tried to give her a sort of sassy-ness to her, but if I do anymore clips, I'll try making her sound more sensual or something. Thanks!

BTW, I was wondering what that cat-face thing was, haha.

[TriPredRavage]

EDIT: Does anyone else notice Katz from Courage on Panty's shirt? HEH.

OH MY GOD!!! It IS Katz!! That makes this all the better!!

being that I've never really watched PSG (other than this clip), I thought all of the voices were good or appropriate. So, I really have no idea what the voices are intended to sound like. But I will comment a bit.

Jordan: I think your voice lends itself well to boys and mature women, so I wasn't expecting anything less than what you gave here, so I was very pleased.

Bree: You went with a voice that I was expecting, honestly. If the voice is too high or anything, I don't really notice it because... well... it's what I thought she sounded like. So to me, as a non-viewer of the series, I thought you were fine. Your mic quality obviously knocked it down a bit, but looking at just your performance I was pleased.

TPR: Not enough to critique. More clips.

[Bryson Baugus]

this was hilarious!

critiques!!!

Panty/Jordan: as mentioned by Kennidy, I think this sounded a bit tomboyish for her. but other than that I thought the acting was great! I lovd the "Peekaboo" bit lol xD

Stocking/Bree: pretty much what I've had to say has been said already. Don't wanna sound like a broken record lol

Chuck/TriPredRavage: your deliveries were simply TOO forced! I can't believe ANYONE would cast you for such a part! [/sarcasm] but seriously! Your Chuck made meh lawl.

[CrowSama]

Once I get the time I'll take a shot at Brief's role and post it here.

Edit: Thanks TPR for catching this little mistake I made here. What I meant to say was that I'm going to post it here on VAA but on a separate thread.