Ribb0ns FALL DEMO REEL 2010 :D

[Ribb0ns]

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This is my first proper Demo Reel!



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[SonicTheVA]

Your demo reel is pretty good. I really like your accent (Southern accent FTW). You really have good range of emotions and voices. The only critique that I have is that you need to put in more energy into your lines. And some of your lines were a bit long so make them a bit shorter. You also need to record in a different room that has less echoes because your mic picked up a lot of it. Other than that, good job!

[Ribb0ns]

Your demo reel is pretty good. I really like your accent (Southern accent FTW). You really have good range of emotions and voices. The only critique that I have is that you need to put in more energy into your lines. And some of your lines were a bit long so make them a bit shorter. You also need to record in a different room that has less echoes because your mic picked up a lot of it. Other than that, good job!

Thank for the critique!

As for the southern accent, which one did you mean? Caaaause, i didnt mean for it to show except maybe in my normal voice in the intro. lol! but yes FTW. xDDD

Yes, I wanna make a winder demo reel with more characters and shorter lines. I'm really excited about it! But im just not sure how to think up character types. Should I copy other characters or make them up? for ex, "lispy girl, nerdy boy, gangster" and just try it out? What do you do?


As for the echo, I record in my bedroom which can be echoy. I was thinking of turning my closet into a studio and put egg crate and stuff up, but is it worth it do you think?? xD where do you record?

Thanks for the help.

[TehPoptartKid]

That scene where you act all devious, and hot, and inviting, and then you kill the person she's with, and then bam! Sent shivers up my spine. Hell hath no fury for a woman scorned. XD

Anyhoo, I liked your mixing/sound effects. The transitions were great with that clock, and that remix sound. You do great with cute voices, serious voices, and funny voices. One of my favorite serious voices was the one in the church, and my next favorite was the one where you acted all devious like, and used a gun. That was cool.

One thing I would like to critique on. When you said your parents were dead, I didn't sense enough tragic and sorrowness from your voice. Like Sonic said, you need to put more energy into your voices, and this is one of the scenes where more energy would have helped it. Sure, you sounded sad, but maybe for your pet hamster or something. Perhaps thinking of a more tragic event, and replacing it with the image of your parents dieing will make the scene more believable? Also, when she gets annoyed, and says, Don't be stupid, I think you could have gotten a little bit more angrier, and blame the death of her parents on her friend that came to see her.

So yes, I agree with Sonic that more energy should have been put into the lines, and the echoes thing as well. It did tend tp pick up a few or more.

Other than that, good stuff.

TPK

[Ribb0ns]

That scene where you act all devious, and hot, and inviting, and then you kill the person she's with, and then bam! Sent shivers up my spine. Hell hath no fury for a woman scorned. XD

Anyhoo, I liked your mixing/sound effects. The transitions were great with that clock, and that remix sound. You do great with cute voices, serious voices, and funny voices. One of my favorite serious voices was the one in the church, and my next favorite was the one where you acted all devious like, and used a gun. That was cool.

One thing I would like to critique on. When you said your parents were dead, I didn't sense enough tragic and sorrowness from your voice. Like Sonic said, you need to put more energy into your voices, and this is one of the scenes where more energy would have helped it. Sure, you sounded sad, but maybe for your pet hamster or something. Perhaps thinking of a more tragic event, and replacing it with the image of your parents dieing will make the scene more believable? Also, when she gets annoyed, and says, Don't be stupid, I think you could have gotten a little bit more angrier, and blame the death of her parents on her friend that came to see her.

So yes, I agree with Sonic that more energy should have been put into the lines, and the echoes thing as well. It did tend tp pick up a few or more.

Other than that, good stuff.

TPK

Aw, thank you so much! I was honestly really scared about the sexy voice. I'm still self conscious recording with people in the house. xD but im glad it turned out well. :]

I literally burst out laughing when I read what you said about her hamster dying! lol, your right. I need to work on my crying more and my anger more. In general, i'm gonna focus on my lines and try to figure out what the characters feeling, not just read whats on the screen. :]

Thanks for the helpful critiques! :]]]

[Raizuto]

I think everything that needs to be covered has been said so yeah. I say get a skype so you can start talking with VAA peeps, learn things etc... lol - Solution for echo, turn your mic power down to like 30%& be facing against a wall or corner.

[MonikerSilent]

Hello hello, fellow first-time demo reeler!

Let us begin with the ending. I love that final line/voice. I think you delivered it wonderfully.

Others above me have commented on the microphone and echo thing, and I'll also toss my vote in there. Unfortunately I am not knowledgeable on how to accomplish a better quality so I'm pretty useless here, I'm afraid. I also agree with the comment about putting more energy into the more emotional lines. They seem a bit too "acted", as opposed to acted. Uhhh, if you get what I mean! I hope I am making sense.

Overall, I think this is a very well-mixed first time reel. I think it really shows that you did your homework and took it seriously, aiming for the best! And to that I say: awesome. Keep up the good work!

[Ribb0ns]

I think everything that needs to be covered has been said so yeah. I say get a skype so you can start talking with VAA peeps, learn things etc... lol - Solution for echo, turn your mic power down to like 30%& be facing against a wall or corner.

Thanks for the tip! And yeah, I do have a skype! How do I link it to this account? Is it somewhere in settings?

[Ribb0ns]

Hello hello, fellow first-time demo reeler!

Let us begin with the ending. I love that final line/voice. I think you delivered it wonderfully.

Others above me have commented on the microphone and echo thing, and I'll also toss my vote in there. Unfortunately I am not knowledgeable on how to accomplish a better quality so I'm pretty useless here, I'm afraid. I also agree with the comment about putting more energy into the more emotional lines. They seem a bit too "acted", as opposed to acted. Uhhh, if you get what I mean! I hope I am making sense.

Overall, I think this is a very well-mixed first time reel. I think it really shows that you did your homework and took it seriously, aiming for the best! And to that I say: awesome. Keep up the good work!

Thank you so much! I will be putting more energy and seriousness into my lines. I've been having proplems trying to record with my parents in the house. It makes me self-consious But im gonna fix that!!!! Maybe drinking a red bull will help with the energy?? xD

[TehPoptartKid]

Thanks for the tip! And yeah, I do have a skype! How do I link it to this account? Is it somewhere in settings?

If I'm not mistaken, you go into private messages, then edit your details. Put down your skype name in one of the contact choices, and boom! You got it!

TPK