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  1. #1 Enter Sandman - An Original Story. 

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    Enter Sandman was a story I wrote that is loosely based on the song of the same name sun by Metallica. When I say loosely, I mean in between every paragraph of story, I have a lyric from the song.

    The plot is fairly simple. It is told from the perspective of an adult who is recounting his experiences with the dark as a child. He wonders how kids get to be afraid of the dark, when they were never taught to be.

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    If you could offer any feedback, that would be great.
     

  2. #2 Re: Enter Sandman - An Original Story. 
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    Generally very good. You were rushing this a little and your popping a bit too but it's not that noticeable.

    I suggest slapping some thing under this monologue. Nothing fast; aka psycho, more like the tempo and pace of say [ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vQVeaIHWWck"]YouTube - Moonlight Sonata[/ame]
     

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