Black Paper Moon [FANDUB]

[Raespiracy]

Tell me what you think of it. Criticism is welcomed.

[ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XsV2hnkyzJk"]YouTube- Black Paper Moon fandub [Raespiracy][/ame]

[paraparamore23]

I love this song!

Keep in mind that this critique is done from the singer's perspective; not a voice actor's

You were about a half-beat off here and there. Be sure to watch out for the timing of the lyrics.

I felt that you were shouting/whining the song the entire song. When that happens, the audience can hear the trouble you're having with the song. The song doesn't really have that much of a difference in dynamics, but if you observe how tommy originally sings it, she backs off on a few notes.

You were pitchy when holding out the higher notes, but other than that, it was good.

[Raespiracy]

I love this song!

Keep in mind that this critique is done from the singer's perspective; not a voice actor's

You were about a half-beat off here and there. Be sure to watch out for the timing of the lyrics.

I felt that you were shouting/whining the song the entire song. When that happens, the audience can hear the trouble you're having with the song. The song doesn't really have that much of a difference in dynamics, but if you observe how tommy originally sings it, she backs off on a few notes.

You were pitchy when holding out the higher notes, but other than that, it was good.

Thank you for this. Do you have an idea on how I can work on not sounding shouting/whining. Because I try to keep my voice tame but..I just can't? And I just dont know how to stop it from doing it that D":

[paraparamore23]

Hm...

Try giving it a *little* less air than usual.

Other than that, I'm not quite sure how to address that problem. Sorry.

[Tylec]

I love this song!
You were about a half-beat off here and there. Be sure to watch out for the timing of the lyrics.

I also thought that the lyrics were a half-beat or so off tempo. Several of the extended syllables ("I'm Faaaling, Down into my Shaaa-dow") were held just a touch too long.

[somachan14]

this was very good~ although you were a half-beat off for some of it, I thought this sounded great! Work on the timing is all~