DKG's One-Shot Monologues (#2 - Requiem of Antispyral)

[DarkKnightGrave]

DarkKnightGrave presents
One-Shot Monologues

The One-Shot Monologues Series is basically a one time run through of a monologue from movies, TV, Anime, etc with no stopping.

One time, One recording, One-Shot.

Monologue #1 - Agent of Chaos

Note: I know I don't sound like Heath but.....I did keep most of the mannerisms though. XD

Monologue #2 - Requiem of Antispyral

Note: The filter did go all the way to the end and screwed up the ending. That's why it sounds different. Sorry in advance.

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

MORE TO COME!!!

[DarkKnightGrave]

Bumping for critique.

[DarkKnightGrave]

One last bump.....for now.

[hyperknees91]

Ya know man this wasn't too bad, I think it seems like you were trying slightly too hard to do it like the original instead of doing it on your own and so it lacked some of the impact.

Basically I thought the inflection changes were good and the dialogue flowed well and you definately weren't static so it was pretty enjoyable overall.

I would however say that at the beginning and such you seemed kinda abrupt with certain lines in an awkward way that made them seem kinda unbelievable like you would inflect too much power on certain lines to emphasize them but it just didn't seem to work as well as it could have. Also your diction was slightly down at parts "most with words that begin with P" but overall it was decent in that regard.

Overall I think it got much better half way in as it seemed you eased your way into the character and the dialogue became more natural sounding. So anyway he's a tough cookie character to play so if anything try to work on grasping that inner insanity even deeper~

Good job~

[DarkKnightGrave]

Thanks for the words of wisdom, Hyper. I totally agree with diction on most words that start with p. Been quite a problem lately when I record. XDD As far as everything else, I knew most of it already. I am always my biggest critic and I say yeah....you hit everything on the nose. The next one I do, I will aim to be more natural sounding. Once again, thanks for the critique.