Tales of Deadside: Tale 1 - The Puppet & The Innocent

[DarkFire]

Tales of Deadside

Tale 1 – The Puppet & the Innocent

WARNING: This contains material that is not intended to those who are faint of heart. You have been warned.

MP3: http://www.mediafire.com/?kdoiim552jt
Word Doc: http://www.mediafire.com/?wtkmatntwtj
YouTube Form: [ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HcTVz5kc58Y"]YouTube- Tales of Deadside: Tale 1 (1/2)[/ame] [ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kVU6WqGTkmI"]YouTube- Tales of Deadside: Tale 1 (2/2)[/ame]

I had this idea in my head for a while. It’s just something to keep me occupied till people hand in their lines. But yeah as the warning says it is dark so please don’t watch it if you get scared easy. Then again when I tested the “scary” factor it was on a 7 year old so I don’t if its effective…[INSERT LOL HERE]

Oh yes! One more thing, I invite anyone to redo this and supply their own voices, music, sfx, etc. This tale is in the link next to “Word Doc:”. All that I ask is that you tell me you’re doing it and you credit me as the writer. Other than that, I haven’t got a problem.

ENJOY!!!

Written and Mixed By Aiden “DarkFire” Carroll
All Voices By Aiden “DarkFire” Carroll

Characters:
The Lord Of Deadside (Narrator)
Little Johnny
Pinocchio

Music Used (In order of appearance):
Chichi no Omoide – Majin Tatei Nougami Neuro OST
Kaisou – Majin Tatei Nougami Neuro OST
Cleo’s Theme – Orphen OST
Azalie’e Theme – Orphen OST
Kiki – Majin Tatei Nougami Neuro OST
Sono Nazo Itadakimasu – Majin Tatei Nougami Neuro OST

[DarkFire]

Bump!
just really looking for some feedback here

[Crimson]

I really liked it. It's a cute concept that was executed pretty well for the most part. I enjoyed your narrator voice a lot.

A few things you could improve on would be:
-mixing of BGM: there were a few times the BGM just cut off suddenly. Try fade outs or trimming at natural breaks in the rhythm so it's not as jarring.

-watch for mic pops/maxing out your mic. Annoying as it is to have to redo an otherwise perfect take simply because there's a little bump in it, removing those little defects makes everything sound way more professional

-try cutting your script down a bit: There were a few parts that I just felt were too long and would be funnier if a little less was said.

But great job!

[DarkFire]

I really liked it. It's a cute concept that was executed pretty well for the most part. I enjoyed your narrator voice a lot.

A few things you could improve on would be:
-mixing of BGM: there were a few times the BGM just cut off suddenly. Try fade outs or trimming at natural breaks in the rhythm so it's not as jarring.

-watch for mic pops/maxing out your mic. Annoying as it is to have to redo an otherwise perfect take simply because there's a little bump in it, removing those little defects makes everything sound way more professional

-try cutting your script down a bit: There were a few parts that I just felt were too long and would be funnier if a little less was said.

But great job!

Thanks, i'll certainly keep that in mind for the next one. I knew i had mic pops but i was like "i spent 2 hours recording this, not doing anymore." heh heh

Once again, thank you


[Side note for me] WOOT! 100th post on VAA!!!

[Crimson]

You probably already know this, but when recording long narration, sometimes it speeds things up if you splice multiple takes together. You don't necessarily have to redo the whole line, just certain parts.

[DarkFire]

ah fair enough. thank you