The Song of Saya - Episode I: Dysfunctional Reality

[Kennidy]

the song of saya


EPISODE I; Dysfunctional Reality (21:45)
[listen & download]

CAST (IOA)

oumi takahata ... cake batter


yoh tsukuba ... ~xxlittlexgurlxx~


kouji tonoh ... actorman


fuminori sakisaka ... instraclassic


ryoko tanbo ... fantachan


saya ... konata

PRODUCTION INFORMATION
mixed by ... konata (with supervision by instraclassic)
SOUND EFFECTS... ripped from saya no uta, stole from the vaa sfx library
BACKGROUND MUSIC... saya no uta ost
OPENING... "glass slipper" by kanako itou
ENDING... "saya's song" by kanako itou

transcription by ... konata
TRANSLATION... makoto from tlwiki

[Izzy]

First comment o3o will edit later with thoughts

[xSPADEofHEART]

KYAADKJHAKJDHASKJD!!

Downloading now!

EDIT:

IntraClassic: I loved your Fuminori. Your acting was solid, but at times you felt too happy. In general you seemed to happy when you were narrating and talking to Yoh and Kouji. I imagined Fuminori to be more of a hateful character that tries to restrain himself in front of his friends. When Fuminori was talking to Ryoko and Saya, you were perfect!

Cake Batter: Amaaazing!<33 Your Oumi was awesome!<3 Totally mean when talking about Fuminori, but chipper when talking to Kouji and Yoh.

~xXLittleGurlXx~: Ah cute~ Your voice for Yoh was great, but your emotion seemed forced out at points. Great job!

Actorman: I liked your voice for Kouji, but it seemed like you were too happy. Fuminori is still rejecting the rest of his friends so I imagined him to be gentle with Fuminori, but totally free with Yoh and Oumi.

fantachan: I like it! Your enunciation sometimes faltered, but otherwise was good. The way you said your lines felt robotic and unnatural. You seemed to be stressing all the words in your lines and it didn't sound how a regular person would talk.

Konata: Aaah so cute!<3 I knew you'd be a perfect Saya and you totally nailed her! I'm looking forward to how you portray the other parts of Saya's personality.

Scripting: I liked the way you scripted this. You only had Fuminori narrate even when the POV changed which is something I liked and the narration was natural. Great job!

Mixing: The effect you used for the monster voices was kinda annoying after awhile. It also seemed like a mic problem at first so it was sudden to be hearing that then Fuminori's perfectly fine vocals. Other than that it was perfect! I especially enjoyed how you added an OP and ED song.

Fantastic job everyone! I can't wait for later installments!

[fantachan]

Hey, cool, it's out!

I'll give a more in-depth review later, but I did notice that two takes of one of my lines were used in this. D:

[Kennidy]

Hey, cool, it's out!

I'll give a more in-depth review later, but I did notice that two takes of one of my lines were used in this. D:

That was a really horrible error. ;__; I don't know what happened, but if I can, I'll definitely go back and fix it later! ;__;

[~xXLittlexGurlXx~]

oh its out i cant believe i didn't see this! >.<
ill give a full critique soon! =]

[Glastonberry]

Wow! This really turned out really well! Even though I listened to a majority of this before hand, I still love it! This is great for your first radioplay!

InstraClassic: I gotta admit, I think I did fairly well later on during the Ryoko and Saya arc of this episode. The beginning didn't seem very "Fuminori", but then again, it still sounded good. Hope I don't sound narcisstic, but I think I did good for my first lead role. Think I could do better on that "I hate the world" emotion.

Konata: I was really shocked to hear your Saya. From hearing your voice usually, I would think "Well, Konata is cute", but when I heard this, it sounded light and smooth, exactly how Saya was. I really have no complaints with the voice!

Cake Batter: Not much to say other than, "HOLY SHIT, ARE YOU OUMI? THAT WAS PERFECT". But in all seriousness, you sounded spot on for the character with that "I'm annoyed" voice.

LittlexGurl: A very cute Yoh, indeed, though, as Cake Batter said, it did sound like you were forcing some lines out, but nothing to really nitpick about. It sounded very cute, which is going to make me feel really bad for you in the second episode. (You'll see!)

Actorman: I think that your take on Kouji was fluid and very delicate, but sometimes, your enunciation just sounded awkward for a split second. Yet still, I love the way you yelled "Fuminori", your Kouji made me smile.

Fantachan: Your voice definitely had that Ryoko tone in it, but some of that enunciation sounded monotone and robotic, like you just didn't care at all. But you know, it does feel like Ryoko, but she is basically "pretending" a majority of her emotions in the actual visual novel, so, I really shouldn't be nitpicking. It sounded ultra nice and smooth!

Mixing: For your first radioplay, the mixing was solid! Though, I think I heard some of the clicks I made from recording here and there, but you know, it was hardly inaudible, I just had it a very loud volume. Or maybe it was just me, haha. Not much mixing was really needed, and for what was there, I definitely loved it all!

I seriously can't wait to start doing more, everyone!

[Akumaryu]

Saving this space so I can review when I listen to it tomorrow.

Edit:

InstraClassic/Fuminori Sakisaka: I liked your voice as Fuminori. I think that a few times, you could have given him a little more weakness to his voice, particularly when he is dealing with "the creatures." A few too many times, you presented him as a bit too calm. In the internal monologues, you did a better job of it, so just be mindful in the dialoguing moments.

Cake Batter/Oumi Takahata: This was a good casting choice. You might want to be a little more careful about how you get through your lines; the rhythm of your lines was a little strange, so just be careful. Other than that, I enjoyed your presentation.

~xxlittlexgurlxx~/Yoh Tsukuba: You made me smile. I really liked the innocence of your voice, and the commitment here is worth applauding. I really didn't find any issues with it, as the character is not really that confident. So yeah, no complaints.

Actorman/Kouji Tonoh: Well, your voice fits this guy to the T. Your lines didn't sound read at all to me. They felt truthful, and that really helps get across the fact that he and Fuminori are friends. Great work. ^_^

Fantachan/Ryoko Tanbo: Very doctorly. I thought that some of the lines were just a tad bit off in the sense that they sounded like you were talking AT Fuminori, instead of TO him. I know that doctors can be a little distant, but I would think your character is very concerned for Fuminori's well-being, so she would be a bit more sensitive about everything. Just my own personal thought on it. Otherwise, great work, and I can't wait to hear more of you!

Konata/Saya: Yeah, you ARE Saya. You really have a knack for these kinds of characters. Nice, sweet, innocent, NOT annoying, and well-presented. I know the future episodes are going to be good.

MIxing: No real complaints. Sound effects were solid, voices were leveled nicely. My only two issues are the fact that the background music was a little overpowering at times, so I had some difficulty understanding the voices over it. Just be mindful of that. The other issue is, as Fanta said, the use of her line twice. Nothing too major, though, so nice work.

Overall: This project gets a 4.95/5, and has received Aku's Seal of Approval™!

[Cake Batter]

:D!

So I just finished listening to this, but I gotta get ready for class. Definitely gonna come back and write some more, but I really, really liked this! Great job to everyone!

[kite stonewater]

I'll post a reply after I get back from the eye doctor