BladeBlur 2009 Demo - Mark II

[ValkyrieCeles]

I wrote a post and then it didn't post! so I'll try to write the exact thing I said in the first post, or close to it.

Oh my goodness Blade, this is a huge improvement from your last demo. The voices had variety and tons of energy. The laughs gave me chills, they were brilliant! I especially loved the voice that had the Sonic Heros music behind it, but your teen and child voices were great too.

The two voices after you introduced yourself sounded fairly similar to me, but other than that I heard no other voices that sounded the same. I loved this demo to bits

You better get cast in more roles now, this demo pwns!

[bninjah]

Well Jeez its about time! I can't wait to listen. I'll critique when I have time. =)

[Erica]

This is leaps and bounds an improvement upon your last demo real! I can't say much that hasn't already been said, but I do think you could benefit from taking the time to enunciate your words a little better. They tend to get lost a little within your accent.

But otherwise, this was very nice! keep up the great improvement!

[fairuza]

I'll have to echo everyone else here. I thought you made a huge improvement from your last demo as well. I thought that you have a nice variety of range and emotion. I do agree with Ben on maybe adding one clip of laughter for next time,but I still really liked your laughs alot. Each one of them gave off a different character of their own. Very great job!

[ichigo_m]

Gosh it took me all too long to critique this~

WOW This is such a HUGE improvement from your last demo.
Such huge improvement even in the last few months!
I am thoroughly impressed!
I love your high voice at the end!
I have really no complaints.
Amazing job!

Ichigo = Blade's fangirl~

[xSPADEofHEART]

Yaaay new demo!>D As people have said already, this was a huuuge improvement from your last reel! Your acting was great and range was wider. I suggest making the pauses between the voices shorter though, they were too long and felt awkward.:3

Great job!!

[Akumaryu]

Alright, as others have said, this is hands and again a HUGE improvement over your previous demo. And now, for some in-depth critique. And remember, I <3 you.

Voice 1: This is a good voice/emotion/line to include, but I would try and wrap your mouth around the words a little bit better because it sounded a little bit slurred. Also, make sure that you don't overpower your own line with your music choice.

Voice 2: Another good choice, and just another example of a time you really need to enunciate. This line feels like there's a lot of power behind it, so even though it's quiet, it should still be clear and crisp in delivery, and enunciating will help that a lot.

Voice 3: I actually think this is my least-favorite in the reel. I would definitely work on this voice a bit and get it down and practiced, because it wasn't very consistent throughout the line. Script-wise, I like it, and your diction was pretty clear. Just need to practice the voice more.

Voice 4: This one seemed a tad fake to me. Again, watch your enunciation. Beyond that, I liked the overall emotion of it, but the laugh at the end actually seemed to pull away from the creepiness of the character. See if maybe you can give him a more subtle laugh. It will accentuate the character a bit, and it will separate him from some of your other voices more distinctly.

Voice 5: This was a good attempt. Sounded a bit like you swallowed your words a bit, so work on your enunciation again. Also, see if you can make him sound a little tougher and a little more dumb. I gather that he's a henchman, and you really want to exaggerate that fact in your demo reel.

Voice 6: This voice sounded excruciatingly similar to Voice 2. There's no problem with including two deep, brooding character voices, but you really want to give them each their own character. I honestly thought this guy was a continuation of the previous guy, just in a different emotion. See if you can't play with your intonations or the way you move your lips and tongue to pronounce the words. That might help change up the voice a bit so it's more distinguishable.

Voice 7: I LOVED this voice. This was absolutely an AMAZING inclusion in your demo reel. The only problem here is your enunciation again, so really work on that, and this'll be a voice you'll want to keep for a LONG time.

Voice 8: This is one you probably could have done without. As others have said, having so many laughing lines in the same reel can get a bit boring for the listener. I like that this is a different kind of deep voice than the previous two, so that's a good thing. See if you can work with the script and come up with a line that you could use not including a laugh.

Voice 9: This was another great voice to keep on this reel, and it honestly surprised the hell out of me. THIS is the laugh I would keep. It really defines the character and plays well to the rest of the line. Diction was good, but try not to move your head around so much. If you're worried about the volume of the line, then lower the volume of the recording and keep it all at one place. When you pull your head away from the mic, it really affects the volume in a negative way, so try to avoid that.

Voice 10: HOLY SH#@*!^~~~!!!!!! Where the HELL did this voice come from, and why have we never heard it before?! This is hands down the best voice and line in the whole reel. The line was delivered clearly, no diction issues at all, and the character was presented with a significant amount of innocence that is important to portray in a young character. KEEP THIS VOICE FOREVER, OR I WILL STEAL IT FROM YOU!!!

Voice 11: Good idea to include this voice, but this is another time where the music really overpowered the voice. I would bump up the volume of the line and lower the volume of the music. Diction was good, so no real complaints there.

Voice 12: I honestly had no idea this was you. I thought some other sound clip had started up on my computer. This is another keeper. Be careful not to peak on your scream, but otherwise, this is a good medium voice. With one like this, you have no right to not try out for the same roles that I do. And I mean that. ^_^

Overall: I farkin' love you. This reel is filled with so much awesome and win it should be illegal. The improvements you've made in the short time since your last reel are phenomenal. And I know you'll only get better. I hope my feedback can help you a little bit, but otherwise, keep at it. You've already impressed me a ton.

[Majinboo0111]

Dude, all the voices seem so colorful and full of life. You have a great range high and low! Your accent works for some of the voices, and for some it kinda took away. But you have a great control of it for people do don't want to hear it (which I wouldn't understand cause your accent is AWESOME!)

It definitly kept me entertained and amazed the more I listen, so it definitily did it's job! I can't really nitpick much. Amazing job dude!

[Kennidy]

You've improved so much since your last demo reel! I'm so proud of you, Blade, and you were amazing in this!

I love your voice so much. <3 We still have to do something together! Let's go go go!

[Usako]

I'm not very good at this critique thing...but I liked it and I can see why everyone wants you in their dream cast.

I think one of the more amusing ones was the guy trying to cross the road. I liked that one. XD