Originally Posted by
Catoni15
Sorry--I don't know if this is just me or not--but when I try to listen to Scene 2 it's really, really short. It says 14:00 but it is much shorter than that. I opened the file up in Audacity and it says there's only about 8 seconds or so of audio file. XD
EDIT: Ahhhh, there it goes! That's much better.
Here's my review for the scenes so far:
XTREEMMAK (Vesta): You're getting better with this role, I can tell! You sound more comfortable with it. The insidious, evil plotting nature of the character just rolls off your voice. You convey it so well! Keep up that energy and performance! No complaints here. ^^
Lucien (Claude): Here's another one good with energy. You didn't hold anything back--it wouldn't have suited the character you were playing, anyway. This is a guy who called for over the top and, damn, did you give it! On top of that I really liked how you handled the battle scene with Jay. Your attack cries and grunts sounded ferocious, like Claude was really going at 'im. I think I mentioned before that I expected no less than execellent. Really enjoyed your performance. Again, no complaints.
Batgirl (Tarpeia): You didn't have a whole lot of air time here but from what I heard you did well. I particularly liked the line, "Dear me. When you're right, you're right!". I'm not totally sure why, but...I just did. The emotion, maybe? Zankoku did mention a "more than one face" angle with this character who is supposed to "over do it" and I think you pulled that off just fine. Can't wait to hear more from you!
Kitsune Squeak (Esther + Evangeline): Again, I don't know how you do it. Your Esther and Evangeline voices are becoming more and more distinguishable from each other as you do this. Good job with this! I don't think I have any real complaints with your performance.
Masako-kun (Jay): Good job with the first two scenes so far. I enjoyed how you handled Jay's seriousness and determination while managing to make him fun and joking in lighter moments. Awesome performance of the battle scene! It sounded so convincing when Jay was hit by Claude's attack--I could hear real pain in there! Excellent job.
Okami-kun (Allen): Why do I feel like I haven't heard Allen in, like, forever? I know he was in the last episode (maybe he had shorter air time?). In any case, I did feel like I missed him until I heard him here--and hearing him again reminded me why. I like Allen and, moreover, I like what you do with him. There's the light-hearted, joking Allen who knows what's what that I'm used to. But when he got serious with warnings for Jay--I almost didn't recognize him! I don't know why. Maybe you just did that so well. In short, good job and keep it up! XD
Zankoku no Yami (Writing + Mixing): I seriously need to go to you for secrets of mixing battle scenes--seriously. I don't know how you do it!
Ah, haha. Anyway...
Writing's pretty solid and so's the mixing. I have no real complaints except for a couple of little things--mostly nitpicking here. It has to do with the writing:
One of Tarpeia's lines goes something like this, "Nothing too groundbreaking for your simple-minded state." It's not wrong, really, but the wording sounds awkward to me for some reason--mostly the "simple minded state" part. You could have just left it at "Nothing too groundbreaking" but then the jab at Claude wouldn't be there (and I'm guessing this lady's taking as many jabs as she can XD). It's possible to leave it at that and let the tone of speech imply the insult--not everything has to be said. Or find another way to word that without losing what you meant.
This may possibly be an issue of stylisitic preference. Maybe she has awkward wording for a reason--like that it's part of her character. We all have our own way of going about things. I only offer suggestions. XP
Waiting in anticipation for the remaining scenes. I look forward to them! ^_^
