Brand New Commercial reel. (Comments are welcome)

[dangavster]

here is my newest commercial demo reel, the last one i did was terrible. I figure'd i'd make this one GOOD this time.

Enjoy.

http://www.4shared.com/file/70821399...MBER2008_.html

Let me know what you guys think.

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Contents:

Intro Blip.

Advertisement for theperfectpickmeup website (non existant)

Advertisement for "The PC Hotline" (Random name)

Commercial for TropixFizz (Non Existnant Drink)

Commercial for Speedway Motor (An actual Radio commercial i did, its cut short in this reel)

Random Clip of my "Tutorial Voice Jared (the fat guy) Thompson" (A short clip of some random radio station like clip i did where he talks about Adobe Audition 3)

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Runtime: 2:00

[Beckie]

You have a nice voice, easy to listen to. (: However, I think you should add in more vocal variety to your lines. The intonation very "hiiiigh, high, high, low," if that makes sense. I think the lines were missing a relationship with the projected audience of all these products. Also, with the exception of the "PC Hotline" clip, all the voices sound pretty similar.

From a technical sense, the "intro" really threw me off, and I'd get rid of it, if I were you. I had to start it over because I couldn't understand what it was and thought that my comp went nuts or the file was corrupted (and that little sound effect in general was distracting throughout the clip). Just stating your name in your normal voice is more than enough. As for the length, it's too long (1 min at best, 1:30 at the most). Maybe do more, shorter clips next time. Other than that the mixing itself was good, and it was all good quality. (:

Good luck! (: