Pale moon-Original song

[fairuza]

I thought now would be the right time to get back into my writing and creative phase with coming out with something original.
Other than my first song "Down and Out" which was my starting point of coming out,I've decided to share one of my recently finished works that I feel accomplished about.It took me a couple of days to write this song and several more days composing the track.
Feel free to drop a line,hope you enjoy one of the many tracks I have in store for the future.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/song...songID=5624333

[Whatocean]

I really couldn't make out the lyrics.

But you had an interesting sound going on there.

[Margo]

Fairuza, I <3 youuuu D: D:

That sounded so cool, hehe. It reminded me of SH music XD I really liked the creepy sounds at the end. Very unique song =O I agree with Whatocean, I couldn't really understand the lyrics, but you do have them on the soundclick page, so I read them there, hehe. And your voice = cooooool! YAY FOR FAIRUZA! *Waves flag that says Fairuza*

[fairuza]

Thank you both Whatocean and Margo for appreciating this song.
I should've used less of the echo filter to make this song more understandable lyrical wise.But I'm glad you like it,I very much appreciate it!

[CKMel]

D: This thread should be getting more attention.

Like Margo said, you sound really cool!
I think that one of the reasons why you're hard to understand is because of the echo? Your vocal track also seems to be a little soft, though at the same time I feel that the background is a little soft... Or maybe more muffled. Yeah, I think muffled is a better word XD;;...
Anyway, this was really cool :O... Props to you for putting up an original song! ... It's really a rare thing we see around here.

P.S. Your vibrato is amazing. XD

[Kitty]

Eee, Fairuza~! *fangirl scream*

I don't think I've heard you sing before. Maybe I'm wrong. D: But it was really impressive. You're songwriting is just..wow. And your voice is just haunting. It reminds me a little of Amy Lee. Who is my idol, ftw.

Okay, okay. I must critique now.

To start off when the song first started, there was a slightly high pitched noise, kind of like a hum? It would have been nice to edit that out. And the echo was a bit overwhelming, as I would have liked to hear your vocals a bit more clearly, so I could make out the lyrics. The song in general was for the most part well written; however, it seemed to just repeat and repeat. It may help if you have a climax in the song, using some cool percussion, sound effects, or etc. Maybe change the key to get some variety? Other than that, it was pretty nice.

Your vocals were pretty flawless. Just be sure to support! It sounded like a few notes were poorly supported.

Ahh, I loved it though. And as I clicked through your Soundclick, I saw the NANA covers. And one question popped into my head.

WHY IN THE WORLD HAVEN'T YOU POSTED THEM HERE YET, SO PEOPLE CAN SEE HOW AWESOME YOU ARE?

Ahem. Keep singing! <3

[fairuza]

CKMel: Thanks alot. It was kinda difficult to work with trying to make this song (mainly the instrumental) have a pop out sound to it.I think the conflict with the vocal echo kinda reduced the background of the song because of how louder the vocal were which might be the minor problem.Other than that,I think from the feedback so far I needed to work on the control for the most part.

Kitty: Thank you as well with your critique.The funny thing is with the music serving as the background is that I recorded it from my tv screen,then used the quick filter settings to boost it up which might explain why there was a slight humming noise.I orginally made this song to be an intro to the many other songs I'm gonna create for a possible amateur album one day.It was kinda intentional for the song to have a repeated tune to it as a starter up.I think I posted some of my other songs on my soundclick a little while back somewhere.

Thanks for the encouragement so far to you all,I'll continue to keep it up.