General: Well, for many of the lines the lip syncing did not match up. I assume this is due to the script. However, there WERE times when the lip syncing did match up :]
BGM: Awesome choices of BGM considering the OST isn't out yet.
SFX: Some of the SFX were really well done (ie: the sparkles) but the ones ripped from the clip REALLY lowered the quality of the fandub. IMO, if thats the only way to put in SFX for a certain part just leave it out because it's really distracting otherwise ;-;
Amarante- The voice was alright. In fact, it may have even been good but your acting lacked so much that it is really hard to judge. Like Rika said, you sounded bored. Keep working at it ^^
Rashinban- At first you're voice didn't fit but as the episode progressed I found it more suiting. It was kind of forced, but when I first started deep voices were really hard for me to keep up with. It'll be the same with this role for you, keep practicing.
Edwyn- Absolute perfect voice + acting. Great job.
Kitsune- Same as Edwyn.
Corey Maddox- The voice was good. I liked how, for the most part, surprisingly fit really well with mine :] It's hard to judge you since we mostly talked at the same time xD;
Chiaki- I loved your performance. I have no complaints :]
Clients- Some were really well done but for the most part they had flat acting and some mic problems ;_;
It was fun. I extremely look forward to the next episode