TwilitWing - My Immortal Cover

[TwilitWing]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jnFVelTZXP4

Critique is appreciated!

[RYTEDR]

Impressive job! A very smooth, rich, pleasant tone to your voice and overall quite reminiscent of Evanescence. I'd be quite proud of your accomplishment.

Your voice, with its' smooth richness and clarity, had a great deal of maturity to it at the beginning. However, I feel that you were tightening up vocally when attempting to hit some of those higher notes. There was a couple of distinct moments where you can clearly differentiate when you let your voice flow freely and when you clamped down and attempted to attain that stronger tone. This lead to a strained sound to my ear that unfortunately broke the illusion of mature grace and I heard traces of a very young, childish, shaky tone that did not set well with me.

From 0:42 to 1:25, you can hear what I mean by your voice flowing freely VS. clamping down and weakening your overall performance. You start off quite beautifully, on key, and within your range, but you begin to get shaky approaching the 1:25 mark, and at that mark your voice loses a lot of power due to the strain.

You did best on the verses, where you were within your range and everything sounded very free and natural. Unfortunately, and I'm not entirely sure if you were trying to emulate Evanescence or not, you were overreaching for the chorus and the bridge. From 2:46 to 3:10 every note was fairly flat, and is something you should definitely consider focusing on. Each subsequent attempt at the chorus after the first one got continually more flat and shaky as well, and I was clenching at my throat because I felt like you were gathering a lot of tension as the song went on. Your mature and clean tone deteriorated from what I assume was vocal exhaustion from too much tension in your vocal folds. Near the end you sound like you aged ten years younger from when you began.

Remember, set your voice free and it will love you for it, and it is very important to stay within your own range! You will definitely get there though with practice and perseverance. You have a lovely instrument and I think you started off very strong; you just have to tighten the gears a little more and work on keeping tension from restricting your lovely voice.

I do hope my critique will help you improve. Good work, nonetheless. I truly do see potential in you.

EDIT: Greetings from a fellow Virginian as well! :P

[TwilitWing]

Thank you for the critique! I heard the song from a different computer, I definitely heard the flatness a bit. =/

The harmonies came with the track, it isn't me. xD

I will definitely take your critique to heart! I'll use it in the future!

[Cydonia]

Moved to Music Studio. :)