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comfan93
07-26-2011, 05:49 PM
Prologue (http://voiceactingalliance.com/board/showthread.php?t=54770)

Chapter 2 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-KKyb0wi-Yo)

Note: Chapter 1 is on an old computer that I can't access to upload right now.

Okay, so this is the third chapter of a very long fan fic/audio play. The Rise of Team Rocket is a (hopefully) epic adventure of eight children that arrive in Kanto. Yes, that sounds cliche, and yes, quite a lot of it is cliche. Don't let that put you off.

"Darkness falls on Kanto, as the world slowly beings to be undone... Team Rocket’s increasing with power, no longer is anywhere safe, as they attempt to rule the region and capture all Pokémon. But long ago, there was a prophecy that eight children would arrive and destroy Team Rocket. But is that the whole truth?

Joshua, Jennie, George, Molly, Tom and Anna all arrive in Pallet Town, receiving starter Pokémon from Professor Oak. At the same time, a resident of Pallet town- Luke, begins his journey. The six children, watched by a mysterious boy called Shadow, must discover the truth of the prophecy and fulfil it, while Giovanni clutches at his only hope by attempting to catch the three legendary birds. But before they can fulfil the prophecy, they must discover who the eight children are. More and more of their friends appear, and Giovanni is unable to work out who they are.

But not all is as it seems, as in a shocking climax, the seventh and eight children are revealed, and their actions may ruin the Pokémon world for ever.

Pokémon: The Rise of Team Rocket, where heroes are created, and tragedy, action and great adventure awaits..."

Chapter 3 Summary

The children receive their Pokemon from Professor Oak. But, of course, it doesn't quite run smoothly. Featuring Optimumbuster as Professor Oak

Chapter 3 PART 1 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xl9s_y1bhIw&feature=channel_video_title)

Chapter 3 PART 2 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FfHzk-9RuBg&feature=channel_video_title)

Chapter 3 PART 3 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=meSWW5YhWiU&feature=channel_video_title)

STARRING:
Narrator - ForgottenSnow
Joshua - Piolet231
Jennie - FumieZ
George - AniVids
Molly - hujireky
Tom - The Chimera Virus
Anna - GoldenrodGirl
Luke - SolidJohtoPhoenix
Shadow - SolidJohtoPhoenix
Laura - Kanehana
Giovanni - Lord Lethyonai
Professor Oak - Optimumbuster

MORE ROLES COMING SOON

Chapter 3 Stars:
Narrator - ForgottenSnow
(I wouldn't say your lines were as strong as they have been before. And I'm not sure if it's just my computer, or the quality of your lines is really... not quite so good this time around. However, you're still a good narrator, and keep the pace flowing well. Well done.

Improvements: Check quality? Send lines in quicker.)

Joshua - Piolet231
(Didn't really have many lines in this chapter. But nothing wrong with what you gave me. Can't really give any comments because you literally only had three or four.

Improvements: None.)

Jennie - FumieZ
(Finally! Quite a few Jennie lines. Your voice is adorable, just saying. But yes, well done, you've got Jennie almost spot on to how I imagine her. Sure, you're not Scottish, but close enough.

Improvements: None.)

George - AniVids
(As I've said before, it's strange hearing you as George cause you sound a lot older. :P But I'm getting used to it now, and I like you as George. I loved the part where George's hair is on fire, you made it amusing without sounding TOO ridiculous. Well done.

Improvements: None.)

Molly - Hujireky
(Well done, again. Not many lines this time round, but you've probably got the most distinct voice in the entire thing. You're a perfect whiny child voice. Only problem is that sometimes it's a bit over the top, and rather... cringey. Like that line I asked you to redo.

Improvements: Not so high-pitched. xD)

Tom - The Chimera Virus
(Very amusing in this chapter, and your best work yet. I did feel your screams were a bit... forced, and were verging on stupidly funny rather than... well, more realistic. :P But it wasn't a problem.

Improvements: I understand that screaming might sound a bit odd if you're not home alone, but... I don't quite know how to put it into words. xD)

Anna - GoldenrodGirl
(Our new Anna! Well done on jumping in so quickly. While I think Voiceofanangel had a better voice for Anna, you're fantastic as her too. You're annoying, but still loveable in my opinion. You were humorous, and you did amazing at the massive rambly line. Really amazed I managed to find a new Anna after VAA dropped out.

Improvements: None.)

Luke - SolidJohtoPhoenix
(Well done on the... three lines you had. I think you need to work on making Luke sound a bit more interesting. I know it's probably difficult playing two characters, but if you could make Luke as good as you've made Shadow without having them similar, then... it'd be great.

Improvements: What I just said.)

Professor Oak - Optimumbuster
(Best. Professor. Oak. Ever. You are seriously perfect for the role, and definitely my favourite voice actor in this chapter. It's a shame that Oak doesn't return until around chapter 40, because you are brilliant as him. You made me laugh, everything was great, and your out-takes are lol.

Improvements: Audition for a main character!)

"Awards"

Golden VA - Optimumbuster

Silver VA - GoldenrodGirl

Bronze VA - FumieZ

Well done everyone!

Adam
07-26-2011, 08:06 PM
Moving this to fan audio.

GForce
07-28-2011, 01:14 AM
Hiya, let me just say congratulations on being consistent and keeping a quality project going for at least a few more installments. Consistency is key here and is a good habit to practice early the fact you got a cast that's still recording with you says a lot about their work ethic and their faith in you as a producer.

One thing I think you should try for your next episode is to practice "show not tell." The narrator in the piece really bogs down the pacing and makes it feel like I'm having the story read to me as opposed to experiencing it first hand. Instead of simply telling us that a character has been drenched in slim we should hear the event take place along with the character going "YUCK GET THIS OFF OF ME!" While it does take more work, it's going to make your production sound a lot better in the long run.

comfan93
07-28-2011, 09:54 AM
Thank you very much for the feedback. (A rarity for me. xD)

I suppose I could try, but I... don't think I'm quite skilled enough at editing and all that to make it realistic. xD I'll definitely cut down on how much the narrator says, though, if that makes it better to listen to.

GForce
07-28-2011, 07:49 PM
It's worth a shot to give it an effort. You'll only get better by breaking out of your comfort zone a bit. Besides it's gonna make you look super awesome to your cast as they see that their director/mixer is going out of their way to improve the quality of their work. While getting the right sound effects is a huge pain in the but (along with foot steps, I HATE mixing footsteps) it all pays off in the end.