[Poem] Fear of Loss

[Tali]

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Fear of Loss


I feel weak.
I feel alone.
Wander as strangers pass me by.
No one can help, nor cares to try.
Until the day you walk not past but to me.

You see me.
My soul clear as day.
You lock your eyes with mine.
A fire lights that we can't define.
I see in your face hope but even more yearning.

You try to break
The fog that surrounds me.
But fear fills me just like before.
What if you want something more.
And so afraid of how i'll fail, I run away.

I can't face you.
I'm too scared to try.
If I have something, I can lose it.
I won't have love, I'll never choose it.
You are cast out and away as protection.

You won't return.
No-one likes to lose.
It's my fault you cried silent tears.
I ruined happiness with my fears.
You'll move on, I never can.

Your confidence will return.
Only courage can replace fear.

I feel weak.
I feel alone.
Wander as strangers pass me by.
No one can help, nor cares to try.
Until the day you walk not past but to me.

[Cefaclor]

Wow, it conveys so much emotion. So much so that I feel saddened for this person. Alone. Its not a very good feeling sometimes. But then I guess it depends...oooh meditation is awesome alone at the beach at dawn.... BUT ANYWAY lol, about the Poem, I like it, you really bring out the concept of bystander apathy.

I like this line "You lock your eyes with mine.A fire lights that we can't define." It gives me this perfervid image, lol, its dramatic but funny. I see two ppl that turn to each other and like a 'VOOSH' fire spark ignites between them.That line is so dramatic lol. I like it.

[Tali]

thanks for the comments and i like your description of vooshing. i love that word. Now I gotta voosh off.