AX Monologue Final Practice Run

[Seymour]

Since I will be in California next week on the days I could get the chance to practice, this will be my last run on it before the big day, and it's basically come down to two different takes.

Take 01 (Inspirational)
Stream/Download (http://www.box.net/shared/pxa8c601r6)

Take 02 (Rage-building [if that's a phrase])
Stream/Download (http://www.box.net/shared/c31vmvjs1c)


I pretty much have exactly how I want to deliver them, but since it's not about my choice most of the time, it's what the judges, and the listeners would want, so I need to know which take I should use for the auditions.
Also of course any last bit of feedback I could get, I just won't be able to redo them on VAA though.

Thanks for listening, and enjoy...if you can

[ElliottSkywalker]

Ok, bare with me becase m keboard is broken. These were 2 reall great takes! Bt the first one sonds like o lost control of or voice a little when o tried to maintain the rage and all that. The second take is mch better. The emotion is a LOT stronger and it was more enjoable to listen to. :D So, if o can, I wold go with the second one.

[Kinkajou]

Jeez, I gotta hand it to you Patrick, That was awesome :')
But seriously, I think take 2 was a little bit better, Because I could really hear your emotion and your uhmm, passion for that drill x'D?
You should definitely do take 2. Though it's up to you to deliver that same emotion to the judges.

I'm sure someone will upload the whole thing on YT, So I can watch how you did >D

[Akumaryu]

I do agree with everyone that the second take is definitely better. The emotional build is much more effective and the read is a lot more natural. I still think there's a bit to much staccato to the way you deliver the lines, but there's definitely a lot more to it than you had at first. Great work, and I can't wait to see you wow everyone at AX. :)