View Full Version : Pi_Face314's Very First Demo Reel!
03-03-2010, 04:03 AM
Alright, I've never made a demo reel before, so forgive me if I did this a bit wrong. Anyways, here it is!
Bring Me to Life by Evanescence
Chopin's Butterfly Etude
03-03-2010, 04:28 AM
For a first demo reel, I have to say, it isn't that bad. Although the music is a bit overpowering at some points, especially the first bit. I don't know what kind of mic you own, but the quality isn't all that great. It could just be the program you're using. What program is it? Also, most voices sounded the same, which is ok, because each take contained a different emotion. Also, slurring is a little bit of a problem here but that might just be because of the quality. Sometimes I didn't quite catch what you say. Energy is lacking a little. Don't be afraid to let it all out. That's what voice acting is all about, after all. The range was a bit the same, try expanding it a little more (I know I need to work on that too x.x) But overall, this is quite good. You definitely have potential. Just remember to lower the music a bit the next time, or duck it if you have to. :)
03-03-2010, 04:31 AM
Thank you very much! The program's fine, but I think the mic is my problem (I'm using a Rock Band mic). Still, thank you very much for your comments. I'll keep them in mind the next time I make a demo reel.
03-04-2010, 10:36 PM
Bump for critiques!
03-04-2010, 10:39 PM
Another problem seem's to be your voice is only coming the the left ear.
03-04-2010, 10:40 PM
Alright, I'll try to fix that (I'm sorry, I'm not very good at mixing.) Anyways, what did you think of the emotion, voices, etc.?
03-04-2010, 10:59 PM
I can't really give a propper analysis as it's loud, in one ear and then quiet:
Level the AMP to reasonable level
Ensure IO (input/Output) audio streams are equal so it's level
Maybe get a new mic
03-11-2010, 01:49 AM
Bump for critiques? (And I swear, I'm looking for a new mic!)
03-18-2010, 01:34 AM
Not too bad for a first demo! Some lines seemed a bit awkward, I think you need to work on your emotions mostly, some seem a bit bland. Your lower & higher range need work, but your mid range seemed to have a good amount of energy and seemed to be your strong point, I can see you playing energetic teenagers very well. Your first line seemed to peak at the laughing, I suggest stepping a bit back so it doesn't sound too muffled, and you don't have a peak problem, but I can see you planning Jessie from Pokemon with that line! The line at 0:16 seemed very unbelievable and forced, as if it should have been angry, but I didn't feel any anger, just like a gruff tone, as if you were trying to force it into a boyish sort of voice there? The voice at 0:29 seemed like it should have more happiness, as it seemed to be a little girl, so it wouldn't be bad to exaggerate things a bit.
Also, some music seemed to loud.
ALL IN ALL, very nice for a first demo! You have some nice voices, but you need to go the extra mile and show your emotions and acting skills. Be familiar with your characters you are portraying, and believe you are them. If you don't, and your uncomfortable with them, we won't believe them and will be uncomfortable as well. Keep going! Great start =D Try expanding your range as well =3
03-18-2010, 02:05 AM
Let's see...overall not bad in emotion, but to make it better here are my remarks:
1) "crazy laugh"--The crazy laugh sounded a little rushed so it doesn't sound quite as genuine. Not saying to make it slow-mo or anything but maybe make it more like "hah hah hah hah!" instead of "hahahaha!" if you know what I mean? For lack of a better example you can see my first sample on my demo reel for a speed that I think sounds more natural (as natural as an evil laugh can be, harhar)
2) "Sleepyhead"--the voice sounds like it works for you and the expression sounds pretty good.
3) "Don't wake me"--the expression is good but the voice itself sounded a bit forced--you were trying to do a deeper voice, so work on making it sound more natural, or otherwise try to stay within a more comfortable range.
4) "Your move"--a good voice, but sounded more monotone than I think it should have; try making a calmer character like that sound more dignified or something like that.
5) "candies"--a cute voice, but again perhaps a bit too similar to the other ones; maybe make it higher and more distinctive? Also, the emotion was lacking in this one; she should have sounded almost squealing in her happiness I think to get the idea you wanted across (like the last syllable in the word would be very high pitched, and the lines would be said faster in her excitement).
6) "nothing to live for" -- the first sentence sounded okay, but the second sentence again didn't sound that convincing. You should sound more desperate and pained here, or perhaps bitter and angry, depending on the character you had in mind.
7) "anthem lady"--I couldn't quote this one because I couldn't hear the voice over the music XD;; But the voice itself sounded actually kind of a natural lower one, so next time reuse that voice and make sure the music doesn't drown it out XD;;
8. "something to eat"--expression is okaaaaaay, but nothing very distinctive about this voice or character, so try to think of how to make it different from the others in those ways.
9) "beat me" -- distinctive voice, that's for sure! XP Music was an issue again here though, too loud.
10) "take a go"--it was okay, could be more distinctive (at least it sounded fairly natural though), expression could be much tougher though (as in like a tough, strong sounding girl), and the battle yell didn't sound that convincing. Try actually throwing a punch or miming a sword thrust when you do this; you in fact WILL hear the difference; the yell will sound a bit higher pitched, faster, and piercing, and yes, you'll have to be loud so warn people around you if you have to XP I had to get this pointed out to me too.
Overall: Do work on making the voices sound more different; I could tell you were trying to do that so work on making it more pronounced. Also, yeah Rock Band mike is probably not the best one to use (I heard a lot of peaking that was distracting)--I recommend a Logitech USB, what I use, because it's hella cheap (like $25 or less) and it has very clean quality, I pretty much just have to amp it a bit after recording and it's about as good as people with more expensive mikes apparently XP
03-26-2010, 12:46 AM
I can't really critique much besides what has been said (0:42 was the loud bit), but I have a suggestion: set the recording software for the mic to record as mono instead of stereo.
Generally, you tried to get into character, it just lacked the extra oomph. Like I say (and practice myself), practice, practice, PRACTICE until it feels pitch perfect. At least I can tell you're on your way there! :)
04-01-2010, 12:11 AM
Critiques would be much appreciated!
04-17-2010, 05:43 AM
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