[Poem] Hope in unlikely places.

[Tali]

In this poem I focussed less on the technical structure and more on the message I was trying to get across. Enjoy!

Hope in Unlikely Places

This world has too much bloodshed.
Too much hate.
Too much fear.
We know this and despair.
Because of this we know there is hope.

Plane hijackers crash a hundred people to their terrible deaths.
The families will never feel complete again.
The world mourns.
There is hope because the world mourns.

Poverty. Many children starving and wretched.
Their lives constantly snuffed out like candles.
The world feels guilty.
There is hope because the world feels guilty.

A woman murders her baby because of a madness.
She can not understand what she has done.
The world wishes it knew what to do for the best.
There is hope because the world wishes.

You read this poem.
You are sad because of the terrible situations I mention.
There is hope in your sorrow that shines like a beacon.
We will one day stop these things.
Until then there is hope in our attempt.

[TESM]

a neat little poem that sometimes can be too graphic. explore the language and work with it.

hold the emotion is less words

[Cefaclor]

I like it. Its very sweet :)

[Tali]

Thanks for your comments! :D

[ihatecomputers]

well you are right you did focus on the message more... anyway i'll put this to you: yes these things are horrible, but without them how can you understand what true beauty is without things like this to compare it to? yes there are a lot of bad things in the world but it does no good to dwell on it. Id love to see a sequal to this with some positive's on how to possibly make the world better place, to do something about these horrible things you mentioned. (just a thought) oh yeah i like your work- keep it up!

[Tali]

well you are right you did focus on the message more... anyway i'll put this to you: yes these things are horrible, but without them how can you understand what true beauty is without things like this to compare it to? yes there are a lot of bad things in the world but it does no good to dwell on it. Id love to see a sequal to this with some positive's on how to possibly make the world better place, to do something about these horrible things you mentioned. (just a thought) oh yeah i like your work- keep it up!

I completely agree with you that there are good things and you know i may actually do a sequel poem. Thanks for your comments!!! :D