Haku needs help on art

[Kei]

Ok this is my pic and i have some questions i need advice etc.

http://img99.exs.cx/img99/9282/Nefe.jpg

I realize she is crooked, so dont worry about that
(There was a point to her crookedness i just never finished it so ya...)


So Any advice to fix this pic would really be helpful!

Face structure?
Clothes?
Hair?
Eyes?
Nose?
Mouth?

any small detail is helpful! Thanks.

[kt_rocks]

It's really not that bad! XD! I love it... the only thing that caught my attention was the bust... haha... I guess it's a little pointy in my opinion

but whatever! don't listen to me! :P Some cartoonish things look like that anyway :D

hehe, I really like this picture! You should post more! :P (I love the necklace)

[Kei]

it aint point XD It just looks that way cuz i didnt complete the curve, i cut it off before i reached the hair, But ya it does look pointy ill fix that

[hideko_dahlia]

Okay, you said any little detail, so here it comes...

1. She needs eyebrows.
2. Check the hand. It needs to be slightly bigger. (Put your hand vertically on your face-- your hand is as long as your face. Ah, proportions.)
3. PERSONALLY, I would bring the right arm back a bit; it looks like it's in an awkward position for that pose. Maybe it's just me, though.
4. Another personal thing, I would curve her back just a little bit, it looks like she's about to fall over backwards. Again, though, it may just be me.
5. Try putting some folds/wrinkles in the clothes to give them more plasticity. It's amazing what a few random lines can do.

Sorry if this is overly harsh, but it's just stuff that I notice, as a visual artist. ^^;; Hope it helps!

[Kei]

Okay, you said any little detail, so here it comes...

1. She needs eyebrows.
2. Check the hand. It needs to be slightly bigger. (Put your hand vertically on your face-- your hand is as long as your face. Ah, proportions.)
3. PERSONALLY, I would bring the right arm back a bit; it looks like it's in an awkward position for that pose. Maybe it's just me, though.
4. Another personal thing, I would curve her back just a little bit, it looks like she's about to fall over backwards. Again, though, it may just be me.
5. Try putting some folds/wrinkles in the clothes to give them more plasticity. It's amazing what a few random lines can do.

Sorry if this is overly harsh, but it's just stuff that I notice, as a visual artist. ^^;; Hope it helps!

1. About eyebrows i didnt add them... first off it didnt really have anywhere to draw them, the bandages end right above the eyes so... i couldnt fit them ^^

2. Yes the hand is a big problem for me, in the full pic her other hand is normal sized ^^

3.Yes it does look aquard, i no what u mean now that u brought it up. Ill fix that.

4. I have a bad habit of drawing characters tilted so i tried to fix it with no avail. ^^; im gonna have to work on that.

5. Yes folds folds folds i didnt even thing of that. Well the drawing is not yet complete ill put some folds in ^^

Youve been very helpful thanks! Just one question, is there things about the pic that im doing correctly. Id like to know what im doing right so i no not to go adjusting it.

[hideko_dahlia]

The overall design is really nice. And I really like the hair. The clothes (design) and the necklace are good... And minus the hand, the proportions are pretty close. And the facial structure is really good. There are a few nit-picky things that -I- would do, but it looks fine the way it is. (I'm a crazed perfectionist art school kid... Don't mind me!)

If you move the eyes down a tad, you can fit the eyebrows in, and it should still look about the same. ^^ If you want some anime pictures to reference from, go look at some of the VAA members' deviantART pages. (Go look at http://vaa-club.deviantart.com )

[Kei]

yes i thought the eyes were a tad to high anyway THANKS !