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MooglyGuy
10-16-2004, 05:48 AM
Lots of random stuff I came up with tonight right here: http://www.zophar.net/personal/mooglyguy/miscvoice.html

Lucien
11-06-2004, 07:14 PM
I'll critique these in order.

Narration; I couldn't understand a damn thing you were talking about. I blame this more on the text then your narration style, though I would ask you to watch out for this tendency to 'jolt' parts of your sentences. It's SORt of a disTRACtion when people Do that. Overal, I would just suggest for you get a different piece of copy to read; that one is just incomprehensible.

Faux commercial; Even when doing a joke commercial, there has to be some sense of believability in order for it to be pulled off. What I heard was someone 'trying' to sound like one of the classic radio announcers. I do give you credit for rambling off the long 'not responsible for' list.

Tennessee; I'm not familiar with the particulars of the Tennessee dialect, so to me it sounded good; very natural sounding.

Demon; Your diction went downhill in this one; sounded garbled. I couldn't understand what you'd say in some parts, and in other parts it sounded like you mixed up 'at' with 'and' and things like that. I had to listen to it about 5 times to understand everything. Your outburt was also a bit 'mellow' ; it seemed like your were holding yourself back from yelling.

Keep doing what you're doing.

ClymAngus
11-07-2004, 12:20 PM
OK, watershiip down.
First off you have a good reading voice. It's even and well tempered in tone, you may wish to experiment with light variations but that's up to you. Unfortunatly, it also gets clipped like a bitch by the type of compression software your using. This makes it very difficult to understand. You are rushing it a little, and gasping when you hit the end of a sentance , Try breathing through your nose when you need to take an inhale of breath. Coming from a DJ background (probably, as you stated in your avatar space) you may be taking the old DJ adage "silences are deadly" a little to closely to heart, this is not so much the in drama, you can afford a slightly slower pace.

Advert, the speed talking veered into the incomprehensible (mind you most of the time that kind of speech is ment to be incomprehensable so yeah.) Hmmm what kind of mic have you got?

Need a beer. Now that's looking more like a reasonable pace. By slowing down (concentrating on your accent) the entire speech is clearer, cleaner and more defined.

Demon pizza, comedy timing, it's a cow to get right. Not too bad, broke up a little in the middle. Again your compression software is executing your vocal range. "DAM YOU MP3!" The best way to get comedy timing off pat it looking at other people who have been doing so for a fair bit. Forgive me if you know them already but www.sitfuso.com use long narrative structures and aren't afrid of having characters talking to themselves. Take a look, might be useful.

In a nutshell, silence and pacing are as powerful a colour in the voice actors pallette as the loudest scream, in the right place. Hope this is useful :)