Manabi's first song dub on VAA Yes Precure 5 opening Critique please

[Manabi]

So i've loved always loved this song and I decided I was going to fandub it. Please let me know how I should improve^^


here is the video (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1TYCq85_WYw)

if anyone know how to embed it let me know so i can embed the video