Drawing Days (TV Size - English)

[Masako-kun]

So the other day, I got a request to sing the opening song to Katekyo Hitman Reborn for his fandub so I took up the challenge. It came out better than I expected. So here it is for your listening pleasure. ^^

STREAM (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zG7LZP5kx0M)

Original sung by Splay
English version sung by MasakoX
Lyrics by bobsinbobsled

Comments are most appreciated, thanks!

[Jasmine]

ZOMG! I must listen to this! *-*
Too bad I'm in school right now.. they blocked youtube and I can't even go on it using a proxy site because they blocked flash too (Bastards! :()

I promise you a critique!

EDIT:: O my GOD! That sounded so awesome! <3 I really LOVE your range. Too good for a guy *-*
I think you started the song off brilliantly but then at some parts it started going abit off tune. I think if you could just work alittle more on your high notes it would make it sound even better!

Awesome mixing and your voice really suited the song <3~~

Well done!~

[Hikari-san]

lol I wrote an english version myself for the full song. I can't listen right now cuz I'm in english class, but I will when I get the chance.

[Katrina]

wow nice! i believe your voices suited the song very much! ^^

Although you kinda went abit flat at some points i still like it xD well done x3

[Shift]

The lyrics could use some fine tuning, but not bad. And the singing was excellent!

[Hane Moon]

Rock ON, hun. ^-^ I'm so pwoud of mah Otaru!! XD


Not QUITE as good as your One Piece one, but still very very nicely done. :)



And this reminds me...



Get yer part done for you-know-what. ;)

[bobsinbobsled]

The lyrics could use some fine tuning, but not bad. And the singing was excellent!

Damn, that's the second time you've insulted my lyric-writing. Well, now you've got some quality to match for Michishirube XD

EDIT: Hmmm... guess I can't keep this secret anymore... *Posts audition thread*

[Shift]

The lyrics themselves aren't bad or anything, they just don't seem to fit the rhythm as well as they could. For example, the first line "Today an an...gel with no wings stopped by and told me..." makes it sound like "angel" is two seperate words. And the rhythm in the line "The useless me picked up my pen and began to draw", seems off at the end since with "began", the emphasis is normally began, and "to" normally doesn't have that much emphasis in that context; it's hard to explain, but for example, if it's between two strong words, like "Back to work!", it'll be usually be deemphasised, but if it's working with a strong word with a word between them, like "To the moon!", it's be that kind of rhythm. In short, when writting a song, unless you're going for it to be really experimental or something, it should have a rhythm close to normal speech. It'd just take a little more work and some rearranging, but I'm sure it'd be worth it! But hey, that's just how I see it.

[bobsinbobsled]

Well, is it okay if he sings it with yours?

[Shift]

If you wanted to give them a shot, I certainly wouldn't mind. However, I revised the first verse a bit snce then, so here it is:

Today I find a wingless angel’s come and told me,
He’s lost the map that leads the way to where he needs to be,
I can't do much except to take this brush and water,
But soon I find the paint's new life is strong and pure!

I think what I had before was a bit lacking in the second set of lines, so I took another swing at it. I hope it works out!

[bobsinbobsled]

If you wanted to give them a shot, I certainly wouldn't mind. However, I revised the first verse a bit snce then, so here it is:

Today I find a wingless angel’s come and told me,
He’s lost the map that leads the way to where he needs to be,
I can't do much except to take this brush and water,
But soon I find the paint's new life is strong and pure!

I think what I had before was a bit lacking in the second set of lines, so I took another swing at it. I hope it works out!

Must be great to be that good a songwriter XD

[FullMetal Alchemist]

I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-fangirl squee-

Wow! You should really sing more! I had no idea you were that good!

[andy ichigo]

MAN!!!! THIS WAS AWESOME!!! You did an amazing job! <333 I luv ur range. Your energy was great too, but it kinda faultered in a few parts. :rose Keep up the awesome work.

[Kyo_Starr]

You have an excellent singing voice and your emotion/energy was impressive =D Keep up the good work!