.hack//Legend of the Twilight Skit

[crystal]

Hey, everyone out there! ^^ I'm trying to improve on my mixing (and acting) skills before digging any further into my biggest project, The X/1999 Radio Play, so I decided to do a short skit between Rena and Shugo at the beginning of the .hack//LEGEND OF THE TWILIGHT manga. It's my first mix, so it's definitely not the best thing out there. I know I have a lot to work on, so any tips/comments would be appreciated! Script and mp3 are in the zip file. Enjoy. ~ Crys

SFX: www.findsounds.com & James's help. Thanks!
BGM: "Change the World," Inu-yasha OST
CAST LIST:
Rena: Crystal Miller
Shugo: James Owings (Hikuro)

Download it here! (http://www.angelfire.com/games4/silverm_rpg/renaandshugo.zip)

[Evil Guru Dood]

Great acting on both of your parts, but my only complaint is the BGM is so high. It drowns out some of Hikuro's lines and even some of your own Crystal. Aside from that, great job.

*kicks findsounds.com* I get to be the first to kick it! YAY!

~EGD

[Sukisho]

oo this was great, though the either the music could be a bit lower or most of your lines could use a volume raise Crystal, but other then that this was great and I love change the world so of course that was great music choice ^.^

[Tsubasa-no-kami]

excellent ^_^ cute and well mixxed! one thing only.. and that was at times the music was louder than the actors and it was a bit hard to hear what they were saying. (( but you get major plus for including the script!)) All in all, well cast (good job va's! X) a good chemestry there) and good choice of music!

[Hikuro]

:oops: *bows* domo arigatou

I mentioned to her when I first heard it that the music was too loud, another lil nit pick I just thought of was more SFX's...I also think I could of pitched my voice JUST a bit higher....I can do that too, hell my voice range is like Waspinator from BeastWars tooooooooo Low deep Opera voice it's scary.

Just for the hell of it I took pages of the manga, scaned 'em, and made a lil movie to go with the audio....cute lil effects too like page turning. I just made lil edits here and there on the manga so it was easier to view.

But yeeeeaaaahhhhhh my first radio play.

[Mindychan]

Everybody has already mentioned the weak parts but great job!! ^^ Work on that and you'll have it down pat. Like I said, it'll come to your naturally as you work on your bigger project. :3

[LingTina]

I think the acting is excellent! Everybody already pointed out everyhing, so I'm just goig to say that you're a diamond in the rough. ^-^

[still_standing2004]

As promised I listened to it and the only way I can describe it is in these words...


[spoiler:0db8a473e0]What a cool little clip!!! I loved it!!! ^^ ^^ ^^ I loved the voices... the background music!! Ahhhh! It was just AWESOME!!!! ^^ [/spoiler:0db8a473e0]

[crystal]

Aw! Thanks to all of you who took the time to listen! I really appreciate your feedback, and I'll definitely take into heart the advice you have given me when I begin mixing down X/1999. The trailer for that, btw, should be out this Friday. Keep your eyes peeled, and thanks again! ~ Crys

[Ben]

Hey hey. Now, I've only seen the first eight episodes of .hack/SIGN (where little progressed), so I'm not familiar with the story, in general (the rest of the series, manga, games, etc.). However, I thought the acting was very nice. This was my favorite attribute of the short, which should always be the main priority. Also, I didn't detect a hint of static in the lines or sounds, so I'm very impressed. :D

My advice would be to lower the background music. I know sometimes I'm concerned if the audience will hear it or not because it's pretty and/or it carries a scene well, but just remember, even though you know what's being said, the audience may not pick it up. I think you may have caught that and made up for it by including the script. ;) Ok, sound effects. You had decent ones, and it's hard rummaging for quality on free sites. It's just a matter of patience, though.

Nice work, crys.

[ClymAngus]

Hmmm, generally good it had pace to it.

Probs;
Music (already been covered)
Voices (Your voices have a lot of echo, have you considered maybe recording in a bigger room? Or to put up some heavy cloth behind you when you record to stop unwanted acustics?
SFX (you may want to fade the effect in and out using a 1/4 second fade on the front and end maybe head the effect with a sweeping sound, up to you) :)

Other than that, it's truely humbling to see people getting off their duffs and getting involved, I look forward to the next and the next and the next. :)