Shi Shi Rendan Fandub

[TwilightWolf]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=crtyhfMZy7U

I felt like dubbing this scene out of boredom.

Mixing: Keiya

CAST:

Keiya - Sasuke
Shintarou Inuzuka - Lee, Gai, Yoroi
Kyo-chan - Naruto
Shika Megumi - Anko
SulliMike23 - Kakashi
Ayumi-Chan - Sakura
Menchi: Hayate

MUSIC:

Naruto OST

SFX:

from the cliip

[SulliMike23]

I'm a little iffy on some of the voices, even my own. The mixing is so-so but overall it wasn't too bad.

[Rikdo_Osaka]

I like this fandub clip you did of the Naruto anime and everyone's voices were great. Mine could of been better but meh, I have crappy mic and need to work my range.

[Shintarou Inuzuka]

That turned out great ^_^ The mixing was pretty good, though maybe a longer panting clip would've worked a bit better. The acting was also quite good.

[MaNa Shuffle]

Some voices were good.

The mixing keeps cutting off and such and there's lack of sounds.

Some mic qualitys sounded odd and such.

3/5

[sakura-shino]

Keiya as Sasuke: Okay. You were extremely lacking in emotion for many lines, however. Work on it. Remember that voice acting is still acting. Work on some character building. Get yourself into the mindset of the character and don't be afraid to actually yell and scream. Also it will help if you use your body while acting (just a little- please don't flail and hurt yourself XD) to further get into character. You've got a nice voice, work with it. And one last thing- annunciate. Don't let that jaw get lazy! Warm up before acting using lion, lemon and duck faces. They look stupid, but they work!

Shintarou Inuzuka as Lee, Gai and Ninja: Not many lines, so it's hard to tell. As Lee you were fine. As Gai, it sounded rather dopey. But I don't watch the show, so... And I have no idea what "ninja" means.

Rikdo_Osaka as Naruto: To be completely honest...you sounded like Kermit the Frog's kid. I know that you're probably a fully grown man (or at least a teenager) with a mature voice acting as Naruto, but you have to learn how to make your voice high enough without going too high and sounding...froggy. Try looking up some good mouth warmups and vocal warmups to use before you start recording lines. Also, I just don't think your voice would suit Naruto. But I can't really tell, because it's so distorted in this clip. Your emotion's pretty good, but it also could use some work.

Shika Megumi as Anko: Sorry but I don't know who Anko is.

SulliMike23 as Kakashi: Definately one of the best actors in this clip, good job, You get exempted from critique at the moment, because you had so ffew lines and they don't appear to have anything wrong with them I can nitpick on.

RurouniGirl01 as Sakura: And the other best actor (actress) in tehi clip! You had two lines, but you really got the sorrowful emotion across.

Menchi as Exam Proctor: Nothing to say. Good job. Nice emotion.

Mixing: Poor. There were foleys missed everywhere (little sounds people make like 'eh' and gasps, etc) At one point a character appeared to be laughing, but there was nothing coming from him. At another point Naruto opened his mouth and nothing came out. If these sounds weren't in the original, it's still a n issue that you didn't make it clear enough that there weren't supposed to be sounds there. To make it clearer, try making the heartbeat noise louder, so that it draw attention away from the lack of voice. The sound clips you got from your actors were rough and often buzzed. You should learn how to reduce background noise in audio files ( http://voiceactingalliance.com/board/showthread.php?t=7520 <- a tutorial for cool edit/ adobe audition noise reduction :) ) Also, Sasuke's breathing...it was painfully obvious that you looped two breaths into many. This got qquite annoying at times. Mainly because there was something that sounded like a duck call in the background. The noise reduction should help with this, but pay attention when clipping sound files. You background music was at times not very background, taking over Kakashi's lines.

overall a 3/10. Work on it; I'd really like to see you all improve! <3
<3 sakura-shino

[TwilightWolf]

Keiya as Sasuke: Okay. You were extremely lacking in emotion for many lines, however. Work on it. Remember that voice acting is still acting. Work on some character building. Get yourself into the mindset of the character and don't be afraid to actually yell and scream. Also it will help if you use your body while acting (just a little- please don't flail and hurt yourself XD) to further get into character. You've got a nice voice, work with it. And one last thing- annunciate. Don't let that jaw get lazy! Warm up before acting using lion, lemon and duck faces. They look stupid, but they work!

Well I tried to say them in the same tone he did in the clip.



Mixing: Poor. There were foleys missed everywhere (little sounds people make like 'eh' and gasps, etc) At one point a character appeared to be laughing, but there was nothing coming from him. At another point Naruto opened his mouth and nothing came out. If these sounds weren't in the original, it's still a n issue that you didn't make it clear enough that there weren't supposed to be sounds there. To make it clearer, try making the heartbeat noise louder, so that it draw attention away from the lack of voice. The sound clips you got from your actors were rough and often buzzed. You should learn how to reduce background noise in audio files ( http://voiceactingalliance.com/board/showthread.php?t=7520 <- a tutorial for cool edit/ adobe audition noise reduction :) ) Also, Sasuke's breathing...it was painfully obvious that you looped two breaths into many. This got qquite annoying at times. Mainly because there was something that sounded like a duck call in the background. The noise reduction should help with this, but pay attention when clipping sound files. You background music was at times not very background, taking over Kakashi's lines.

overall a 3/10. Work on it; I'd really like to see you all improve! <3
<3 sakura-shino

I didn't use a lot of sound effects because I didn't know how to describe some of them so I didn't know what would work. And yeah, I know Naruto's mouth movements were off, I guess the line was short and I should have messed around with the words to make it longer. And as for the guy that seemed to be laughing, he wasn't really laughing, he was just gasping quietly, not making much sound so I didn't think it was necessary to have him make any sound. The heartbeat I thought was loud enough, why I don't know. The breathing clip, I honestly have no idea why I did that. I don't know what I was thinking at the time. The backround music, if I turned it down any more then people would barely have heard it. And I even had to turn up Kakashi's line so that the music would have drown him out completely.

I'm starting to wonder if I should get rid of this and start over. Cause now I see that it was a complete load of crap and I could make it better.

[SulliMike23]

That explains why I could barely hear my second line. Thanks Sakura-Shino. True that my lines were small, I knew that Kakashi kept his emotions in check.

[Shika Megumi]

I quite agree with SulliMike's first post. ^^;; Everyone was fine, though they could have been better. (Myself included) I agree with sakura-shino that you could have used more emotion as Sasuke and such, but you can work on that. ^^ The mixing wasn't very good as the SFX cut off and there were missing a lot.

sakura-shino: This is what Anko looks like (http://i26.photobucket.com/albums/c148/ReaiIty/anko-sakura.jpg).

[TwilightWolf]

I messed around with it all day today. And I'm not sure if this version is any better then the other one. If it isn't, then whatever. I tried.

[M.ichi]

not sure if its just me, but, I couldn't hear Naruto (me) or Sakura...my headphones may be messed up, not sure...Also, the exam proctor's name is Hayate...I think...and also, Keiya can you try getting on AIM?

[TwilightWolf]

no, it's not your headphones. I just messed up cause I tried to fix everything last night when it was 12:30 and I guess I rushed. but it should be fixed now.

[M.ichi]

Keiya - Sasuke: It was hard to hear your lines, your tone was nice, but your emotion needs some work. Sasuke is a very...flat character I know, but don't make him too flat. Try putting yourself in Sasuke's position mentall (not in reality, please ^^;;) and go from there.
Shintarou Inuzuka - Lee, Gai, Yoroi: these were hard to tell because they were so short, but nice performance, (sorry it's really hard to critique something so short but...) you were okay, just need emotion work a little, thought its hard to express emotion into one line, it still counts
Kyo-chan - Naruto: I suck -_-
Shika Megumi - Anko: Shika, You were great, I loved your tone and your emotion (the questionablity of the line). It was great, no complaints
SulliMike23 - Kakashi: hmmm...I really can't say much...you need to work on your recording and clicks in your lines, but thats not really an emotional or vocal problem. All I can say is, your tone sounded sorta forced...
Ayumi-Chan - Sakura: I actually really enjoyed your sakura...no complaints
Menchi: Hayate: Menchi, I love your range, I have no complaints with you either ^^